Sad Heartbeat as the World Continues

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Fibonacci: 0, 1, 1, 2, 3, 5, 8, 13, 21

A
sigh
summer
stars shiver
in fear on coldest
night as voices echo in bleak
emptiness looking for refuge as birds congregate
in hush sandalwood violating hourly the dawning of flight in white lace of light

1/19/2024

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Ink Empress

Date: 1/27/2024 4:37:00 AM

Dear eve, your fibonacci flows seamlessly and I absolutely love the way youv written this in such a poignant and soulful manner , depicting emotions in the most eloquent way. I felt so deeply your wore weaving: especially “ stars shiver in fear on coldest night as voices echo in bleak“ i can sense the voice of nostalgia through your lines. And i love your subtle use of alliterations. Congratulations on your win: well deserved: thank you for sharing

Silent One

Date: 1/19/2024 11:44:00 AM

I can feel the sadness in this one in this one, especially the last three lines.. Great choice of the contest.. Best of luck..

Hiya Sharma

Date: 1/19/2024 9:40:00 AM

Oh my, I love this Fibonacci so much, so many heartfelt and soul-stirring emotions you've woven here so impeccably..Illustrating hints of darkness, you've described how the essence of melancholy paints our souls yet our hearts still hope for a ray of faith, to save us from the abyss of emptiness.."A sigh summer stars shiver", "dawning of flight in whitest lace of light","hush sandalwood encroaching" Ahh love your wordplay throughout, so stunningly crafted, a FAV from you, best wishes for contest