Hitesh Panchal Poet Rhyme

Ruthless Storm

Clustered is my mind, like the clouds in the darkest form,
Wild are my emotions, as if they lost their entire norm.
Runs the realization of sheer abhorrence, in my veins,
No words can sooth my life’s most excruciating pains.
You could not understand, I always perused to be decent,
May be that’s my fault, a flaw in me of being innocent.
I loved you! I wanted million moments with you to cherish, 
All I expected was your love, but you made my feelings completely perish.
Tried my level best, to change myself and be the one you can be enclave,   
Tired of trying, as every time I died within, for simply being your slave.
Blur is my vision; the route is surrounded by deadly beast,
My life has become a lost way, one in the dark forest of mist.
Here again I ask the same question, to destiny in its complete form,
Will I be rescued with the ray of love, or will I be lost in this ruthless storm… 

							        -‘panchi’ Panchal Hitesh D.

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Theresa Stephens February 5, 2014 at 6:16 AM Hi Panchal, Excellently expressed. One consolation you will find another girl to fulfil your dreams. One word of caution, maybe you could be attracted to unsuitable ones which arouset your lower emotions rather than your heart. Think on you choose wisely for your future happiness. Congratulations on achieving recognition. Regards Theresa. xx Hitesh Panchal February 5, 2014 at 6:45 AM thanks a lot Theresa

Carly Larkin February 4, 2014 at 9:41 PM this is a great poem, the word choice was amazing and even the font you chose served purpose in making it all that much better. My only suggestion would be to maybe play with the line length; perhaps try something like this: "Clustered is my mind, like the clouds in the darkest form, Wild are my emotions, as if they lost their entire norm. Runs the realization of sheer abhorrence in my veins, No words, can sooth my life’s most excruciating pains." Hitesh Panchal February 5, 2014 at 6:44 AM sure Carly !! ill make sure to work harder on that !! thanks for your decent view !!

Sundari Kannan February 4, 2014 at 8:41 PM hi hitesh, wrenching thoughts narrated well made me feel these feelings are best emotion of a human and this phase is crucial for his life...sunkan Hitesh Panchal February 5, 2014 at 6:41 AM that's a wonderful and a sweet way you put my complicated words in simple !! thanks !!

Skat A January 28, 2014 at 2:55 PM Hi Hitesh, Nice reading and spotting you, one of my new favorite poets at the top, hottest, and the best NEW poets list on the Poetry Soup. Thank you for this deep write.... I'm happy for you. ~ LOVE ~ SKAT Hitesh Panchal February 5, 2014 at 6:40 AM ah Skat !! my favorite critique !! pleasure is eternally mine that you liked this one !!

Pace Ink-U-Script January 24, 2014 at 6:47 AM This is a fabulous write my friend! !!! Enjoyed the morning read...Regards INK-U-SCRIPT Hitesh Panchal February 5, 2014 at 6:39 AM i am glad you liked it !!