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Rusty Bikes

Four pedals rusting --

screech of  bikes

grates love’s uphill climb




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Biker’s Dozen for Maureen McGreavy
10/3/2018

heartbreakjourneyverse

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Darlene De Beaulieu

October 9, 2018 at 5:06 PM

Hello Nette,these bikes were well used. You have memories with these bikes. Have a nic evening my friend.

Duke Beaufort

October 4, 2018 at 7:58 PM

When I read the lines in reverse order, it seems like an accident created the rust. I can see it in my mind. Very interesting poem.

Gershon Wolf

October 3, 2018 at 10:55 PM

Love the appeals to the senses, nette. Congrats on a well-deserved win! Best wishes, Gershon

Line Gauthier

October 3, 2018 at 6:29 PM

Congrats on your win, nette. Well penned.

Chris Green

October 3, 2018 at 1:41 PM

This was great my friend. Very clever and creative use of the subject. I really enjoyed this.

Ashley Conte

October 3, 2018 at 10:19 AM

How you use symbolism is amazing; the slow drag of biking reflects some loss of love. Impressive part of your design!

Mystic Rose Rose

October 3, 2018 at 5:41 AM

Ride on dear Nette, your poems delight, whether long or short. as for the contest poem on spiritualist, I chose not to join cuz its a subject too close to the heart, I'd rather not compete . But thank you for your kindness, and caring Love always, Pixie