Paul Callus Poet Verse

Russian Roulette

Playing
          Russian roulette
          With fate

          Fateful
          The hand that tempts
          And flirts

          Flirting
          With the shadows
          Of death

          Deathly
          Silence that lurks
          And creeps

          Creeping 
          Through cobwebbed paths
          Of doubt

          Doubtful
          Uncertainty
          Sets in

          Inner
          Feelings torment
          And gnaw

          Gnawing
          At self belief
          Bleeding

          Blood flows
          Slowly in drips
          It ends

          Ending 
          Russian roulette
          With fate 

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Contest: Mussetle Train
Sponsor: Richard Lamoureux
Placed: 1st

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Julia Ward March 9, 2015 at 5:59 AM A deserving first! Julia, xx Paul Callus March 9, 2015 at 8:43 AM Thank you, Julia. Not an easy form to do; can be a bit restricting. hugs // paul

Nathan D. January 31, 2015 at 4:39 PM Reminds me of the movie deer hunter. I really like darkness you portray with a touch of insight into self destructiveness Paul Callus February 1, 2015 at 4:12 AM Thank you Nathan...your comments strike near the centre. I don't usually go for 'dark' writes, but my muse was unrelenting at the time of writing! // paul

Poet Destroyer A January 15, 2015 at 11:02 PM Thank you for the reply Paul...:)

Poet Destroyer A January 11, 2015 at 8:58 PM awesome win...PD Paul Callus January 12, 2015 at 10:53 AM Thank you Linda....love your visit:) // paul

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders January 10, 2015 at 12:40 AM Back to congratulate you on your first place win, Paul!! Hugs, Rhonda Paul Callus January 10, 2015 at 7:52 AM Thank you Rhonda! Hope you're having a lovely weekend. // paul

Kelly Deschler January 8, 2015 at 1:01 AM There is wisdom hidden in the depth of these lines. It is never a smart idea to dance and toy with death.... I really like the darker tone of this poem. Congratulations on your first place win! Great work, my friend! Paul Callus January 8, 2015 at 10:26 AM I knew you would like the dark undertone of this poem, Kelly...something I can quite relate with your poetry. I'm glad you hit on my Russian Roulette today...thanks for the comments and congrats! Hope your muse is keeping you busy. All the best. // paul

Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty January 7, 2015 at 4:20 AM CONGRATULATIONS DEAR FRIEND PAUL>rajat Paul Callus January 7, 2015 at 12:01 PM Many thanks Rajat! I was also pleased to see your train finishing on the winners' list. Well done my friend. // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser January 6, 2015 at 12:02 AM wowowwowow!! so you alone on the TOP SPOT dearie PAul.... :D!!! nice to see you up there!! let me point out what I like with yours.. I like most your 2nd and 4th I like your usage of the term gnaw...:)! every set brings a powerful message! but tragic there is at the end.. I remember Arthur's poem in w/c he tells this.. as descriptive as yours.. :)! so where will I treat you now or must you be the one :D?!!some cup of frappe.. :D! lools!!! CONGRATULATIONS!!!! Hugs and hugs .. :D!...olive_eloi Paul Callus January 6, 2015 at 12:19 PM Wowww! Olive_eloi!:))) You're a grownup bundle of joy! I like how you express yourself and read into my writing. I must admit that I enjoyed this top win, but I know that there were other good poems that merited my same position. Treats are always welcome...perhaps we can meet half way since the distance is big! .... it's called mental approachment:) Hugs // paul Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser January 6, 2015 at 12:03 AM a well deserve win!!!! :)! salute with a ;) ... :D!

Kayod5 Kayode January 5, 2015 at 11:26 PM This is what the German would say "wunderbar und toll" i.e, wonderful, great and fantastic. You real did this Paul and I am not surprised it topped the table...congrats Paul....huggs Paul Callus January 6, 2015 at 12:24 PM Ohhh you are too kind, Kayode! I've seen all the winning entries and I enjoyed all of them. Thank you for your lovely comments which I always read with much satisfaction. hugs // paul

Connie Marcum Wong January 5, 2015 at 11:00 PM I was hoping this one would be at the top Paul. Very deserving win with this clever train. Congratulations! Paul Callus January 6, 2015 at 12:28 PM Thank you Connie; you are very supportive. I enjoyed your Love Train, too....deservedly being placed on the winners' list. All the best. // paul

Maurice Yvonne January 5, 2015 at 4:25 PM I am so happy to see you Paul take the number one spot. I believe this to be the best poem entered in the contest. Congratulations my friend in earning your first place win. WooHoo!!!! Paul Callus January 6, 2015 at 12:36 PM Thank you my friend. This is how contests go...they're like a seesaw, one minute classifying high, the next low! Enjoyed yours, too...very love trained! // paul

Sandra Haight January 5, 2015 at 3:51 PM Hi Paul, my sincere congratulations for your 1st Place win! This is such an outstanding write! I knew from the beginning it would be at the top! Sandra Paul Callus January 6, 2015 at 12:32 PM Thank you Sandra! I know that you took a liking to it straight away:) I was very impressed by your winning entry...we could so easily have exchanged places! Well done to you! // paul

Jan Allison January 5, 2015 at 3:41 PM you hit the top spot Paul woohoo congrats:-) Hugs Jan xx Paul Callus January 5, 2015 at 5:51 PM Wow! feels good Jan! Thank you for your appreciated sincere support! hugs // paul

Richard Lamoureux January 5, 2015 at 3:20 PM Congratulations, I am pleased to see this is your poem. Paul Callus January 5, 2015 at 3:42 PM Thank you Richard!! I just saw this comment and skipped over to see the contest results....and found a 1st place on the winners' list!! I'm honoured to be rated this high by you. It means a lot to me. You more than made my day...God bless you! I'm glad I took a ride on your train! // paul

Connie Marcum Wong December 14, 2014 at 10:18 PM Wow Paul, you began this and ended this in such a creative way. Yours is really outstanding! #7 Paul Callus December 23, 2014 at 3:21 PM Hi Connie! Somehow this post of yours skipped my watchful eye; just found it by accident. So pleased you liked it; thank you for the lovely comments and top rating. // Have a most lovely and blessed Christmas with all those close to your heart. // paul

Maurice Yvonne December 13, 2014 at 9:32 AM This is another challenge I have not been able to muster up a write. This is an excellent linked chain of rusted wrouth iron. Well done! Paul Callus December 14, 2014 at 4:20 PM Thank you Maurice; I'll be looking out for your entry....you are not one to give up without a fight!:)

Liam Mcdaid December 12, 2014 at 10:44 AM truly excellent pen paul love how you drew this piece dear friend Paul Callus December 14, 2014 at 5:17 PM Many thanks Liam; I was pleased with my first try of this form; will have another go at it, for sure. // paul

Ana Espinola Collins December 11, 2014 at 9:14 PM That was awesome! You've captured the true meaning of such a high risk game poetically...I really enjoyed this one Paul, especially the ending :) Ana Paul Callus December 14, 2014 at 5:14 PM Your remarks are very encouraging, Ana; thank you for a lovely visit! // paul

Andrea Dietrich December 6, 2014 at 8:01 PM love how it circled back the way you did it . WEll done. I find this a very difficult form to do. Paul Callus December 14, 2014 at 5:02 PM I shall keep visiting your posts to see your entry...you will come up with a worthy effort...I have full faith in your 'never give up' character:) // paul

Richard Lamoureux December 6, 2014 at 4:24 PM What if it was a different world than this one, with less problems???? Sorry I couldn't resist! Paul Callus December 6, 2014 at 5:03 PM :) that's called a mental typo! Richard Lamoureux December 6, 2014 at 4:52 PM In re reading your comment mine might not have made sense. I had thought you wrote that you wouldn't have missed it for the world. *lol* Paul Callus December 6, 2014 at 4:48 PM No problem....I usually take things as they come! In life we have to take the good with the bad, the sweet with the sour; no escaping reality...so we might just as well face it.

Richard Lamoureux December 6, 2014 at 3:59 PM Thanks for riding the train! Paul Callus December 6, 2014 at 4:22 PM Would not have missed it for anything!! Thank you for the ride. // paul

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders December 6, 2014 at 1:21 AM An excellent entry for this contest, Paul! I love this form...have a great weekend! Hugs, Rhonda Paul Callus December 14, 2014 at 4:58 PM Thank you for the 'excellent' comment, Rhonda! Hope you too had a lovely weekend...mine has been great, txs :) // paul

Eve Roper December 5, 2014 at 9:46 AM :)

Eve Roper December 5, 2014 at 9:45 AM Very well written with a 7, Paul, this poem reminds me of the movie “The Deer Hunter" always brought back nightmares. Good luck in the contest, blessings eve Paul Callus December 14, 2014 at 4:56 PM Thank you for the lovely comments and high rating, Eve. Take care and God bless. // paul

Dr. Upma A. Sharma December 5, 2014 at 12:42 AM What an amazing write Paul! Gl in contest my friend! Paul Callus December 14, 2014 at 4:44 PM Thank you Upma; enjoyed writing this 'new' form...not as easy as it might originally appear, but it's doable! // paul

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