Rpm's

the rpm's are starting to slow
the spin--taking a new spin
each revolution takes on new light
as minutes fall in line

with clarity..clear like crystal
thunderous wonder sweeps
with the speed of sound it reaches
across the mountain's peak

it catches me off balance
with stealth from my blind-side
it enraptures, complete surrender
embracing all that I find
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Bien Avatar
June 14, 2010 at 6:16 AM
thanks for the suggestion...I see what you mean. I did change it. Thanks for reading..JB
Guzzi Avatar
June 14, 2010 at 6:04 AM
really really like the imagery and word chose...1 suggestion..second to last line...perhaps......rapture....surrender...you don't need the I...who else would it be? ;) Light & Love
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