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Rewriting Fear

Rewriting Fear

That sudden unknown, so unrevealing, 
it's the tell-tale trademark of the one in question 
as it sets off nerves in every-which-way, 
plainly creeping aimlessly neath the epidermis.

Shock-waves traipse, recruiting ghostly minions to crawl hither,
steeping the fleshy folds with squirming eels marinade,
forever slithering downward and chilling our brittle bones,
while simultaneously causing us to gnash our pearly whites.

Until we came upon the realization,
that what had truly manifested itself,
was self-induced and that it was so absorbing,
it had overwhelmed the mind in consuming anxiety,
losing dominance of all mental faculties,
proffering it free-will to buildup theoretical obsessions,
and alternate concessions.

2020 September 30
*2nd Place*
"The Unexplained"
~~Carolyn Devonshire
Copyright © | Year Posted 2020

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Neumann Avatar
October 6, 2020 at 2:35 AM
Very powerful. Kind wishes, Kai
Kelii Kekaula Avatar
October 6, 2020 at 2:40 AM
Thank you my friend, Aloha! William
Ermine Avatar
October 2, 2020 at 4:44 PM
Hi William. Okay, an explanation of what happens to us, poor susceptible mortals. Very analytical look, edged in poetry. Congratulations on its Win.! I think you must have had to delve in and meditate a bit to be able to write this...
Kelii Kekaula Avatar
October 2, 2020 at 5:27 PM
Lol, country boy here, chased outhouse creepy crawlies for sisters, dad golden glove Hawaii trained lanky me. Fear greatly observed by me in others, thanks Sigird, for the much needed laugh whilst missing my sisters and dad, Aloha! William
Devonshire Avatar
October 2, 2020 at 11:00 AM
I think quite a few "paranormal" experiences may be self-induced, but that doesn't make them seem any less real, William. Your poem is fascinating. Congratulations on your win! Best wishes, Carolyn
Kelii Kekaula Avatar
October 2, 2020 at 11:02 AM
Thanks Carolyn, for the opportunity, Aloha! William
Andresen Avatar
October 2, 2020 at 10:47 AM
- Congratulations on your 2nd place in the contest, William :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Kelii Kekaula Avatar
October 2, 2020 at 10:51 AM
My grateful appreciation, Anne-Lise, Aloha! William
Watt Avatar
September 30, 2020 at 7:04 PM
Great observations of the physiology of fear, William! As Roosevelt said, "We have nothing to fear but fear itself". Well done.
Kelii Kekaula Avatar
September 30, 2020 at 8:07 PM
Country boy chased outhouse creepy crawlies for sisters, dad golden glove Hawaii trained lanky me. Fear greatly observed by me in others, thanks John, for your considerations, Aloha! William
Leiser Avatar
September 30, 2020 at 4:50 PM
So intricately described and laced with horror unforeseen! Great write, William!
Kelii Kekaula Avatar
September 30, 2020 at 5:04 PM
Laura, your words were swept up and pleasantly welcomed in its fast arrival, much thanks, Aloha! William
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