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Red Cherry - Collom Lune

Red cherry splashes
in sweating drink, smile flashes.
My first date.



{Form is Collom Lune.
Inspired by Andrea's pretty picture #2}

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Line Gauthier

November 11, 2017 at 8:29 AM

Delightful poem... what the drink the only sweaty thing? Joys of first dates... ;-)

Lenny Gazbowski

May 15, 2016 at 1:57 PM

Nicely penned.

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

August 16, 2015 at 11:01 PM

Ah what a wonderful imagery Isaiah! Congrats on big win!

Kim Merryman

August 16, 2015 at 10:18 PM

A refreshingly clever write, Isaiah! Congrats on your win! Love, Kim

Poet Destroyer A

August 16, 2015 at 8:42 PM

Hi Isaiah, Congratulations on your wonderful win. Always ~LINDA~

Skat A

August 16, 2015 at 1:25 AM

Isaiah, congratulations in Andrea's "Pretty Little Lunes contest" SKAT Love

Carrie Richards

August 15, 2015 at 9:36 AM

I love the double meaning....very clever, Isaiah !! Congrats to you !

John Lawless

August 15, 2015 at 7:44 AM

Isaiah, paints a vivid picture of one of life's more awkward moments...

Jan Allison

August 15, 2015 at 7:24 AM

Dropping back with my congratulations Isaiah:-) hugs Jan xx

Casarah Nance

August 15, 2015 at 7:12 AM

This brought a smile to my face, nicely done :) Grats on your win!

Paul Callus

August 15, 2015 at 6:06 AM

You took this out of the fruit box, Isaiah! Great take! Congratulations on your podium finish! // paul

Andrea Dietrich

August 15, 2015 at 1:00 AM

Isaiah, this is REALLY smart. The way you have the drink sweating, the way you would be sweating yourself on your first date, and that little rhyme of splashes with flashes thrown in. Excellent work!! Congrats.