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Realm of Time

Down by the realm of time There was a fair lady In the end of the dawn She lived a peaceful day Her life too dead but alive She had lives to take per day Soul to consume and live But her dreams never to big Distant land her love awaited But beyond the realm,nothing for her was true If soul she forgave and forgot to take No one knows what the world would do Gods feared her but she wanted love Someone that loved her at their last breath But never she found her one true lover God!! who can love Death!

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 2/28/2016 8:29:00 AM

ANBES, Enjoyed the way you expressed every line. Please keep writing, hope to see a new one from you again. LOVE LINDA

John Fleming

Date: 10/23/2015 4:26:00 PM

An extremely creative little poem, Anbes. I really enjoyed the read. Actually I read it several times...Excellent! A Seven. Cheers! :-) john

Anbes Rawal
Date: 10/23/2015 8:15:00 PM

thanks john :)

Cheryl Glans

Date: 10/23/2015 12:49:00 PM

I think it is perfect as it is. I really enjoyed it. And her love, pain, longing and frustration I can feel it while reading . Great pen!

Anbes Rawal
Date: 10/23/2015 8:16:00 PM

thanks cheryl

Aleksa Engyll

Date: 10/23/2015 9:15:00 AM

I like the concept but believe with some extra tweaking you can make this poem a lot better. If you could expand a little more in detail on this lady and why she became the way she is would give the character a lot more power. Overall I still enjoyed and look forward to moremore.

Anbes Rawal
Date: 10/23/2015 8:16:00 PM

i'll try better for the next write :)