Realm of Time

Down by the realm of time
There was a fair lady
In the end of the dawn
She lived a peaceful day

Her life too dead but alive
She had lives to take per day
Soul to consume and live
But her dreams never to big

Distant land her love awaited
But beyond the realm,nothing for her was true
If soul she forgave and forgot to take
No one knows what the world would do

Gods feared her but she wanted love
Someone that loved her at their last breath
But never she found her one true lover
God!! who can love Death!

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015



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Date: 2/28/2016 8:29:00 AM
ANBES, Enjoyed the way you expressed every line. Please keep writing, hope to see a new one from you again. LOVE LINDA
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Date: 10/23/2015 4:26:00 PM
An extremely creative little poem, Anbes. I really enjoyed the read. Actually I read it several times...Excellent! A Seven. Cheers! :-) john
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Anbes Rawal
Date: 10/23/2015 8:15:00 PM
thanks john :)
Date: 10/23/2015 12:49:00 PM
I think it is perfect as it is. I really enjoyed it. And her love, pain, longing and frustration I can feel it while reading . Great pen!
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Date: 10/23/2015 8:16:00 PM
thanks cheryl
Date: 10/23/2015 9:15:00 AM
I like the concept but believe with some extra tweaking you can make this poem a lot better. If you could expand a little more in detail on this lady and why she became the way she is would give the character a lot more power. Overall I still enjoyed and look forward to moremore.
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Date: 10/23/2015 8:16:00 PM
i'll try better for the next write :)
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