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Rapunzels Untangled Mess

brushed soft hair Rapunzel’s untangled mess sunlight flickering her heart beating as prince climbs up her nest snips her braids cast down eyes unattached love they gleefully slide he grabs her hand they bury cuts witch returns to empty tower, she’s ill hurls herself toward earth she soars on scales flickering loathsome flames dark smoky plumes of hate follow princess fairytale sunrise fool closes eyes Aurora wrapped in light sweet children inherit blooming kingdom honored in parade rose petals bless the honey’d throngs death has come to evil explosive laud seamless confetti balm of kindness spurs their rich golden life throne smiles out eyes twinkle short hair in style new crop of kids play imagine balls twirling crowns

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Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 6/9/2019 11:20:00 AM

This Ninette is Brilliant - got to the top of the class Kim, pass go! Hugs and warm wishes, Jennifer.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/9/2019 7:05:00 PM

Thank you so much, Jennifer! Hugs...Kim

Kurt Ravidas

Date: 6/9/2019 7:10:00 AM

Wow. Brilliant ninette, Kim)

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/9/2019 7:04:00 PM

Thank you!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/9/2019 6:47:00 PM

Thank you, Kurt!

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 6/9/2019 3:10:00 AM

Kim, I love the way you have typed this. It is such a difficult task to get this exactly write, and yet you did. It must be the librarian in you! Bravo! I like this every step of the way!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/9/2019 6:47:00 PM

Thank you so much, my friend!

Jeanne Mcgee

Date: 6/8/2019 12:12:00 PM

This is so creative. I love how you flowed the words to simplify the fairytales and not loose them. The last stanza is wonderful to bring in the present. Jeanne

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/9/2019 6:45:00 PM

Thank you, Jeanne!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/8/2019 10:18:00 AM

This is a very imaginatively designed fairy tale and I like how it went beyond happily ever after into the image of the children and of twirling "crowns" Was that symbolic for the hair as well?

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/9/2019 6:44:00 PM

Imagine them all dancing at the royal ball, crowns twirling around and around and yes crowns can be symbolic of hair. Thank you, Andrea, <3

Vijay Pandit

Date: 6/8/2019 7:44:00 AM

I am impressed by the design and artistry of this poem..it takes a special pen, indeed! Enjoyed reading the fairy tale, Kim.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/8/2019 8:15:00 AM

Thank you kindly, Vijay!