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Rapunzels Untangled Mess

brushed
soft hair
Rapunzel’s
untangled mess
sunlight flickering
her heart beating
as prince climbs
up her
nest

snips
her braids
cast down eyes
unattached love
they gleefully slide
he grabs her hand
they bury
cuts

witch
returns
to empty
tower, she’s ill
hurls herself toward earth
she soars on scales
flickering
loathsome 
flames

dark
smoky
plumes of hate
follow princess
fairytale sunrise
fool closes eyes
Aurora
wrapped in
light

sweet
children
inherit
blooming kingdom
honored in parade
rose petals bless
the honey’d
throngs

death
has come
to evil
explosive laud
seamless confetti
balm of kindness
spurs their rich
golden
life

throne
smiles out
eyes twinkle
short hair in style
new crop of kids play
imagine balls
twirling
crowns

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Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 6/9/2019 11:20:00 AM

This Ninette is Brilliant - got to the top of the class Kim, pass go! Hugs and warm wishes, Jennifer.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/9/2019 7:05:00 PM

Thank you so much, Jennifer! Hugs...Kim

Kurt Ravidas

Date: 6/9/2019 7:10:00 AM

Wow. Brilliant ninette, Kim)

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/9/2019 7:04:00 PM

Thank you!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/9/2019 6:47:00 PM

Thank you, Kurt!

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 6/9/2019 3:10:00 AM

Kim, I love the way you have typed this. It is such a difficult task to get this exactly write, and yet you did. It must be the librarian in you! Bravo! I like this every step of the way!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/9/2019 6:47:00 PM

Thank you so much, my friend!

Jeanne Mcgee

Date: 6/8/2019 12:12:00 PM

This is so creative. I love how you flowed the words to simplify the fairytales and not loose them. The last stanza is wonderful to bring in the present. Jeanne

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/9/2019 6:45:00 PM

Thank you, Jeanne!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/8/2019 10:18:00 AM

This is a very imaginatively designed fairy tale and I like how it went beyond happily ever after into the image of the children and of twirling "crowns" Was that symbolic for the hair as well?

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/9/2019 6:44:00 PM

Imagine them all dancing at the royal ball, crowns twirling around and around and yes crowns can be symbolic of hair. Thank you, Andrea, <3