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I looked inside her wanting eyes and knew that she was solely mine. This brown haired beauty just my size I am her guy, I am her guy I met her at a shopping mall, She looked just like a barbie doll. Standing five foot six inches tall, I gave my all, I gave my all. Ate at a four star restaurant, A night-cap at the coffee shop. I kissed her then she made me stop, she wants to talk, she wants to talk. A couple for a while now. She made me shave my uni-brow. My afro too, it made me frown my head bowed down, my head bowed down.. Jared Pickett 12/27/2006 Asavvy1

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Date: 2/24/2010 1:08:00 PM
Oh, my, I'm sorry, but this one made me laugh, shaving your unibrow(why would you want only one brow anyway?) haha and the last part, I could just picture you bowing your head yes, dear, yes dear. I really LIKE this one. All about how a person can rob you of your essence! Great poem! andrea
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Date: 2/23/2010 11:59:00 PM
Thank you for your always welcome comments JP Rgds Brian
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Date: 2/23/2010 9:49:00 AM
Sounds like some of the happiness left when demands were made. Interesting thoughts that you have penned in this one. Keep the creative pen flowing. Thanks for stopping by and commenting on my work. Sara
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Date: 2/23/2010 8:29:00 AM
So enjoyed this Jared, am liking your work friend, Daniel
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Date: 2/23/2010 8:06:00 AM
Barbie's got to have a clean shaven ken to perfection, LOL enjoyed reading too
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Date: 2/23/2010 6:52:00 AM
So nice to compromise
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Date: 2/22/2010 8:46:00 AM
Lovely love poem..full of sweetness.Charma
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Date: 2/21/2010 4:31:00 PM
Posting new photos of the "new u"?? this was a cool write Mr. J... the perfect scenario for LUV... luv.. "Sweetheart"..
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Date: 2/21/2010 3:18:00 PM
good love poem
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