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Random Thoughts 29 Double Rhyming Haiku

trembling, my bones. My feet are numb, frozen toes. temperatures low. Back-up pilot lights, my adrenaline ignites. curing my frost-bite. Jared Pickett 10/26/09 Asavvy1

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Richard Pickett

Date: 12/1/2009 4:57:00 PM

Good job Son...I see your on... I am trying every style now to see which I like...Nicely penned here Son, as always.....Dad

Sara Kendrick

Date: 11/2/2009 1:19:00 PM

I am glad wouldn't want you to leave us. Keep writing. Sara

John Freeman

Date: 10/26/2009 6:31:00 PM

Awesome double rhyme Haiku Jared, keep rolling on brother. Sincerely, moses

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 10/26/2009 4:14:00 PM

It is a beautiful day to be reading such excellent poetry. Thank you for sharing yours today Jared. Outstanding.Love, Carol

Raul Moreno

Date: 10/26/2009 10:21:00 AM

Ha, this one is good. Nice work Jared...Raul

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 10/26/2009 10:09:00 AM

nice job! turn up the heat!!

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 10/26/2009 9:56:00 AM

Poor guy..with a frost bite..i love the way you did this rhyming haiku,i will do one in the coming days,excellent .as always..Charma:)