Random Thoughts*34* Minute Poetry

(8,4,4,4--8,4,4,4--8,4,4,4)---------(aabb-ccdd--eeff)
                              [Minute Poetry]
                              Mommy Nature



Today, I'd like to stay indoors.
These thunder storms,
electric rods,
enhanced facade.

Cold enough, see possible snow,
biting winds blow.
these ice capades,
keep me at bay.

A slushy mess, not quite freezing.
I wake wheezing,
with goose pimples,
& hardened nipples.


Jared Pickett
12/05/09
Asavvy1
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009

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Kendrick Avatar
December 8, 2009 at 10:32 AM
That is cold. Warm fire and hot chocolate is the cure. Keep the warm pen flowing. Thanks for stopping by and commenting on my work. Sara
Sweetheart Avatar
December 7, 2009 at 5:49 PM
Well is it catchy? your goose pimples and hardened nipples? good write Jared with lots of emotion as to the ugly weather pattern the tri state area has experienced over this past weekend... where have U been? blessings... luv.. "Sweetheart"
Moreno Avatar
December 6, 2009 at 2:47 PM
Nice form and meter Jared, trying different things strengthens the poet in you. Keep up the good work...Raul
Bono Avatar
December 5, 2009 at 6:10 PM
I posted a christmas poem
Culverhouse Avatar
December 5, 2009 at 4:23 PM
yes you do a fine job with a poem, keep it up, very enjoyable!
Chircop Avatar
December 5, 2009 at 11:48 AM
Jsred you always have a way to create a picture of you..and you always bring a smile to my face,,im imagining you feeling cold, dress some woolen clothes..and keep yourself warm..On my little island its very cold too,and all im doing is statying indoors,drinking Hot chocolate and reading my friends:)..Great work here Asavvy--Charma
Devonshire Avatar
December 5, 2009 at 10:09 AM
Well done, Jared, but I'd be happy to trade some of this Florida weather for those goose pimples! You and your father are really posting some great work! Cudos! Love, carolyn
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