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Quiet Lives

brown cows mow the dell stalky egrets pick up ticks busily quiet

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CayCay Jennings

Date: 5/10/2025 3:38:00 PM

I realized a long time ago that the last line should be a kicker, but it was just today that I learned Haikus are meant to be about nature. What I'm saying is I have tripped over my keyboard all day when trying to comment on them. I like yours. Seems to me you got it ALL right. To know that you know you do not know is the beginning of true wisdom ... CayCay

Trina Layne
Date: 5/10/2025 4:01:00 PM

Lol, CayCay. I am still kind of new to Haikus. Yes! There are primarily about nature. Andrea introduced me to the idea of more modern haikus as well - less than the typical 17 syllables. I would say mine is pretty traditional. We get a lot of brown cows and egrets in the countryside. It's nice how they interact - quiet, businesslike, no fuss.