Psyched Out

He stares at her picture, 
the night dark in his room,
his hands are shaking, 
hes phyced out, unsure what to do,
he thinks, what if he looses her,
and looses that adoring, happy look on her face,
his heart stops, he cant loose her embrace,
the tears fall from his fragile eyes,
they wont stop no matter how he tries,
they splatter on the memories,
she's in his heart, like words carved in emory...

she breathes his smell in through cloth,
his jacket held to her face, pressed over her heart,
her mind slips into the night,
the dancing thoughts have a nasty bite,
what will she do, if he goes away,
if she looses him, the thought makes her sway,
the tears spill down her cheeks,
shes crying so hard she cant even speak,
the thoughts in her mind remain so haunting,
shes phyced out, theres no way she can stop,
with every tear that falls her heart unlocks,
he's in her heart, like words carved in rock...

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010



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Date: 5/17/2010 8:56:00 AM
What a story good on the ending N all between. Just stopping by 2 C if U would like 2 join my first contest. The tittle is "Runaway Train" I would think U would do so perfect with this topic do 2 the way U write your poetry. Allowing it 2 runaway with U . I would appreciate it if U stopped by and read my Blog, which ever 1 , I only have 2. lol,,take care Irma
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Date: 5/14/2010 5:02:00 PM
far out, to cool. very powerful, (he's in her heart, like words carved in rock.) this is new the part wher you describe a deep carve of a name , no one can erase. it is a place where it will be unreached. yours for the keeping. do not let it go, always,..p.d.
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Date: 5/14/2010 2:12:00 PM
Nice write. Did you mean psyched out? I could not reference the word you wrote...or is that something of your own meaning? Keep writing, as the imagery is there. Dan C
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Date: 5/14/2010 1:53:00 PM
So sweet of u write a special comment on my poetry today ... I have enjoyed this creative write Rain Bow ..your line touched me deeply ... she's in his heart, like words carved in emory... awesome.. I like to think my luv feels that way about me as I constantly write poetry with him as my inspiration.. thankxxx and nice to meet u .. luv.. from the "Sweetheart" of Poetry Soup..
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Date: 5/14/2010 12:08:00 PM
This is really pretty. To me it seems like a pair of lovers who just got into a fight and are now realizing how much they actually love each other. It may not be what you were seeing but I love how you painted the picture. Its sad but lovely <3 Travisti
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