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Proverbial Monoku

Sanguine songs of summer drift on by
for foolish souls who laze away.

8-31-18

Proverbs 10:5 
He that gathereth in summer is a wise son, but he that sleepeth in harvest is a son that causeth shame.

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Bette Bavington

Date: 3/9/2019 6:49:00 PM

A good take on this. Glad I stopped by.

Vladislav Raven

Date: 10/24/2018 8:48:00 AM

Hi Connie, once again, a much belated congratulations on your win with this wonderful write. You translated this proverb so well in this little poetic gem. Talent always shines Connie. Have a wonderful Wednesday. Hugs....Mike. XX

Line Gauthier

Date: 9/17/2018 8:53:00 PM

Congrats on your podium finish, Connie.

Eve Roper

Date: 9/17/2018 7:39:00 PM

Great rewrite on your Proverb, Connie , congratulations on your win. ~`* Hugs Eve

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/17/2018 5:24:00 PM

Yours had one of the best "sound" effects as I was reading it. a stunner. Congratulations.

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 9/18/2018 4:35:00 PM

Thank you Andrea. : )

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/9/2018 7:10:00 AM

Good choice. Reads like a winner to me. Way to go. Sara

Anisha Dutta

Date: 9/2/2018 6:48:00 AM

Really the monoku is very good. Almost similar proverb also exists in Bengali ( my mother tongue). All the best.

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 9/9/2018 3:11:00 PM

I love your country and its customs and people Anisha. Thank you my friend. : )

M. L. Kiser

Date: 9/1/2018 2:33:00 PM

Oh, I like this...beautifully done.

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 9/9/2018 3:11:00 PM

Thank you much M.L. : )

Paul Callus

Date: 9/1/2018 9:30:00 AM

Both the proverb and your monoku are impressive, Connie; excellent food for thought, unless one is too lazy to bother thinking:) Warm regards // paul

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 9/1/2018 11:46:00 AM

Haha...too lazy for thinking....you crack me up Paul! Thank you. : )

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/31/2018 6:58:00 PM

oh I love how you did yours, Connie. One of the better ones I have seen! By the way, I just glanced at my hotmail but in answer to your question to me there, I will have lunch with my friend after school for my birthday. Maybe Joe will take me out too. I hope to see a movie tomorrow as well as on LaborDay, which I have off!!

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 8/31/2018 11:49:00 PM

Thank you Andrea. Enjoy your special day! : ) xxoo