Black Eyed Susan Poet Acrostic

Postcard

POSTCARD

                                   P ouring through an old box I foun D,

                       O ne postcard, THE postcard, from last Novembe R.

                       S uch an innocuous front, with its Chinese pagod A,

                      T ricked me into thinking it was something Romanti C .

    C onsequently your words, laced with arsenic, poisoned my unprepared hear T,

      A s you confessed you didn’t love me, in ALL CAPS, for everyone to witnes S.  

        R eading it again, before I ripped it to shreds, it was all I could do not t O

                                           D rown in memory's tra P.



6/15/11

(double acrostic and shape poem)

(last line used to be "down a forbidden nightcap", then revised as above.)

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Andrea Dietrich December 18, 2011 at 12:10 AM Susan, I see some congrats below my comment. So it DID win, right? which contest was it in? I can't remember how you ended it from before. But it looks great how it ends on this page!

John Freeman December 17, 2011 at 11:40 AM Thanks for the honor of reading your worthy poetry Susan, Congratulations on your win. Have a Happy Holiday and New Year. Agape, Moses

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl December 17, 2011 at 4:04 AM An excellent rite Susan . Congratulations and happiness to you and yours.x

Bob Quigley December 16, 2011 at 2:48 PM Wow Susan. How clever is this!! I can't imagine being able to pull that off and still have great verse. Congratulations. Well done. I would have ranked it higher. I'm a fan.

Carol Sunshine Brown December 16, 2011 at 1:09 PM Congratulations on your placement in Moses' "Retread" contest Susan. Love, Carol

Carol Sunshine Brown July 5, 2011 at 5:07 AM Congratulations on your win Susan in Paula's "Yard Sale" contest. Love, Carol

Natalie The Rogue Rhymer July 3, 2011 at 10:59 AM Wow-powerful! Congrats. to you on this fine piece!

Ralph Taylor July 3, 2011 at 10:44 AM Congrats on your win, Sue. Excellent piece. Nice going. Have a great Fourth. xxxRalph

Nette Onclaud July 3, 2011 at 8:40 AM congrats on your awesome win, susan.. enjoyed! :) huggs!

Linda-Marie Sweetheart July 2, 2011 at 7:47 PM Congrats Susan on your HM in yard sale contest with this touching write luv..enjoy honor as u celebrate 4th....

Poet Destroyer A June 16, 2011 at 4:40 PM Poetry Assignment# - Form- BALLAD *Category* music and mystery . ~ title~(( waterfalls of terror )),,,,, remember you will be graded on the rules of the poetry form...

Andrea Dietrich June 15, 2011 at 9:42 PM I really enjoyed this, it's very mature writing. Although I think it deserves a high place in the contest, I am worried because you tore it up and didn't save it and I think the contest was supposed to be about something you saved. anyway, I Hope the rule is not so strict when it involves a great poem like this one.

Dr.Ram Mehta June 15, 2011 at 5:37 PM A great piece of poetry, Susan

Carolyn Devonshire June 15, 2011 at 2:55 PM Susan, I tried to leave you a long comment on how much this poem touched me and it just vanished. Soup is having technical problems. In any case, just want you to know I can identify with the way you felt when you heard he no longer loved you. Best wishes, Carolyn

James Foulk June 15, 2011 at 1:26 PM there is all kinds of postcards, some we keep to cherish, some we rip to shreds. this was a great piece you wrote. thank you for reading and commenting on His Prize. there is no reason why i did that. sometimes i just do stuff like that.

Carol Sunshine Brown June 15, 2011 at 12:38 PM We have so many amazing writers here at PoetrySoup and I enjoy reading all the poems. I am happy your poetry was among the poems I was able to read today Susan. Please continue to write and share your poetry with the world. Love, Carol