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Pit and Pendulum

Forgive if I borrow, write and craft some sorrow Beg and steal, I give you this now and tomorrow Pen me under stars, pit me against the best I'll write you a sonnet, put your heart to the test Cause darlin I gotta know what it feels like To taste glory, bring heaven from hell's pike I need to pen a haiku and be through Oh you thought that I meant with you? Hell, darlin, I am seeking fame and fortune I'll pull down stars and ink a supernova This year I no longer stand by till it's over Pits and Pendulum's buried under sandy dune Desert? I will cross it then, a thousand times Water to quench my thirst from otiose rhymes But yet, I'll pen my name in the stars for it Bleed heart and soul for it But you'll find me... at the edge of a razor.

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Debbie Duncan

Date: 7/29/2012 8:52:00 PM

love poetry like this,,,,, good one Tim ;}

Elizabeth Wesley

Date: 4/9/2012 7:14:00 AM

Hi Tim, Surely fame and fortune are elusive; usually happens after we are dead and someone else collects the royalties! May your journey be filled with wonderful poems like this! Love, Lizzie

Sara Kendrick

Date: 1/27/2012 3:51:00 PM

Enjoyed reading your very impressive work..The creativeness and descriptiveness were excellent..Sara

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 1/27/2012 7:56:00 AM

I enjoyed reading your outstanding poetry this morning Tim. This week has flown by. I hope you enjoy your weekend and find the inspiration to write some more during this time. Love, Carol

Dalila Agtani

Date: 1/27/2012 3:54:00 AM

Enigmatic write Tim. What I can see here is a picture of a passionate writer seeking for fame and fortune. It is a piece with varied interpretation which makes it interesting. I enjoyed reading it. Thank you for commenting on my poem. It is a pleasure to meet you in PS. Love Dalila

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 1/26/2012 11:47:00 PM

Tim, i'm okay with borrowing.. especially if your are doing it for a good cause... love your poem... Enjoyed stopping by tonight, have yourself a wonderful Friday! ;-) always,..pd

Nette Onclaud

Date: 1/26/2012 6:18:00 PM

such a beautiful rant, tim... you paint mixed colors on an emotional tapestry... congrats on your win in my contest!.. oh, i'm miss nette, really .. would love the mrs. if ever i.... lol!..:) huggs!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/26/2012 5:45:00 PM

A very interesting way of writing about writing itself, and I love the images of sharpness, the pendulum and the edge of a razor!!

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 1/26/2012 4:41:00 PM

You will never hungr or thirst for romance if you can write poetry like this, Tim. What a pledge of love! Excellent work, my friend. Love, Carolyn

Russell Sivey

Date: 1/26/2012 3:37:00 PM

Great write my friend! I like crafting some sorrow myself, great line there!! We all seek fame and fortune, especially if you're a wandering poet! I really enjoyed your poem this evening! Great Work!!