Pilot Envy

Envy a pilot escape gravity's clutches for oceans of air. Manufactured bird raucous call and rigid wing, momentary flight. A featherless dance in the shadow of a cloud, elusive freedom!

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Gert W. Knop

Date: 9/10/2010 5:15:00 AM

Enjoyed the read of your awesome Haikus, Wayne! Have a great weekend and thank you for commenting "The Rose"...Gert

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/9/2010 5:41:00 PM

I loved these two images: oceans of air/and featherless dance! Awesome. LUv, Andrea

Hyle Chu

Date: 9/8/2010 10:33:00 PM

Some would argue that this is a senryu, but the line between the haiku and senryu are blurred by the contemporary haiku movement. That aside, I think this is a great piece. At first I thought I liked only the 3rd tier, but after further reading, I'm enjoying the whole thing.

Thvia Shetley

Date: 9/7/2010 7:56:00 PM

I agree with Rick, the imagery is excellent. Who knew piloting a plane could be so freeing? You said so much using a fairly limiting form, nicely done!