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For Fortuitous Poetry Contest sponsored by Rob Carmack

Perfume Bottle

One score minus two, on my own,
a strange invitation to dine,
green behind the ears, all unknown,
Mrs. Johnson, how can I decline?

Why this interest she has shown?
In her world, wasn't I misplaced?
Rough and crude, just barely grown,
amidst her femininity and taste.

Among her furnishings and photographs,
my pulse raced.  I thought, "this is it".
I've not heard this new way she laughs.
It feels sinful and illicit.

I felt her fragrant, silky touch,
while before me falling down
(as painted fingernails clutch)
her flowing hair and gown. 

I can't forget the dim lit room,
dressing table, bottle of perfume.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2025

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Ashley Avatar
April 19, 2026 at 6:34 PM
Dear David, your poetic pen paints an intriguing and sultry scene. Alluring poetry. Congratulations for your success in Rob’s contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Ashley Avatar
April 20, 2026 at 12:25 PM
of course.. like all great poetry, heart, soul and the special ingredient; imagination :)
Crandall Avatar
April 20, 2026 at 12:03 PM
Thanks, Susan - part memory and part poetic license!
Carmack Avatar
April 19, 2026 at 6:33 PM
I like(d) them older too :) Congrats on your win.
Crandall Avatar
April 20, 2026 at 12:02 PM
haha, Thanks, Rob! If I knew then... Well, anyway, now I'm older.
Miller Avatar
September 28, 2025 at 7:34 AM
I love this poem, congratulations
Crandall Avatar
April 20, 2026 at 12:00 PM
Thanks, Terry!
Volumes Avatar
September 11, 2025 at 3:07 AM
Good Poem. Leave em wanting more - You Did !!
Crandall Avatar
September 11, 2025 at 1:18 PM
haha Thanks, Speaks Volumes!
Etgen-Baker Avatar
September 8, 2025 at 5:24 PM
love how you tied this to the theme 'bottle of perfume' at the end. Clever. best wishes with the contest, Sara
Crandall Avatar
September 8, 2025 at 6:19 PM
Thanks, Sara!
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