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Penned Behind Bars

Thoughts Trapped Inside Behind bars Scales tipped unbalanced Lack of harmony breeds this chord Caged word's rhythmic pounding amplifies a deep, dark funk Deliverance awaits, the blues scribbled into wall graffiti, notes penned behind bars

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/25/2018 12:34:00 AM

This one even better. VERY good writing and so cool with that prison blues funk vibe!!

Rhoda Tripp
Date: 1/25/2018 5:58:00 PM

Thank you, Andrea. It was my first attempt at a fibonacci form. Not easy. Especially that darn last line. Thanks for stopping in and for your wonderful comments of encouragement.

Edward Mccall

Date: 12/21/2017 3:02:00 PM

I really like this poem Rhoda a great write to be sure

Rhoda Tripp
Date: 12/21/2017 6:12:00 PM

Thank you, Edward. Much appreciated.

Fj Thomas

Date: 12/15/2017 8:45:00 AM

Rhoda I love how you've done this; sometimes not being able to write is the only thing we can write about. Great write!

Rhoda Tripp
Date: 12/16/2017 6:16:00 AM

Thank you, Dear. Much appreciated that you took the time to read. I will stop by your account as well.

Paul Callus

Date: 12/12/2017 8:58:00 AM

Well done with this very well delivered Fibonacci, Rhoda. This could be metaphorical; no need to be behind bars to write these words...some people could feel confined in the life they're living...but a positive outlook could soon lead to deliverance. ~ Warm regards // paul

Rhoda Tripp
Date: 12/12/2017 12:19:00 PM

Thank you so much, Paul. I appreciate you helping me to remember the name of this poetry form. We reap what we sow, so a positive attitude reaps positive results. In due time, I'm sure. Thank you for your words of encouragement.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 12/11/2017 3:38:00 PM

Love it! No need to explain! Whatever the reader sees I go with. <3

Rhoda Tripp
Date: 12/11/2017 10:39:00 PM

Thanks, Kim! You're a Dear

John Gondolf

Date: 12/11/2017 12:52:00 PM

Rhoda, sometimes my thoughts are locked inside as well and I go for days without writing anything, then some trigger magically release them and they spew forth. John

Rhoda Tripp
Date: 12/11/2017 10:38:00 PM

While it's not nice to wish it on another, it's good to hear others suffer this malady. Lol. Thanks, John

Eve Roper

Date: 12/10/2017 9:39:00 PM

nicely done, Rhoda, how I've been feeling here lately hugs

Rhoda Tripp
Date: 12/10/2017 11:55:00 PM

Thank you, Eve. It's a tad frustrating, no?

James Swartz

Date: 12/10/2017 5:54:00 PM

You nailed the feeling of being penned in. I feel this way at times as well. A prison in my mind. Good thing you write to escape!

Rhoda Tripp
Date: 12/10/2017 11:47:00 PM

Yessss. Sometimes the thoughts are trapped inside and I can't find the proper words to release them. You interpreted it spot on. Thank you, James.

Vijay Pandit

Date: 12/10/2017 2:52:00 PM

Perhaps you are thinking of others, Rhoda--who may be less fortunate.

Rhoda Tripp
Date: 12/10/2017 2:55:00 PM

Perhaps. I do feel sorry for those incarcerated during the holidays. Not sure exactly why my muse went in this direction.