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This is a song with three stanzas each of ten lines and each line eleven syllabi. Each stanza hence contains a total of 110 syllabi. It is about a newly grown stubborn daughter standing up to her dad. Enjoy!

1. A satellite on me is so superfluous b’cos even without it, you’ll see my flaws my new adulthood on your eyes is a sty as my every late night makes you pray and cry anytime my rebellion faces your bash my dearly connection with you seems to crash please dad, don’t feel like my missing baluster because of the flaunted young and new mister every man I meet, a potential eyrie falling for opportunists, yet not sorry. Chorus You want the best for me but I want fun you know the path for me but no flowers your love stays too tight, I want to get loose all you see is my sky but I see Earth I need this pause for a replay later. 2. Your restrictions make my inexperience belch exploits from friends and media I want to fetch my lovely journey, you want to ride and steer my resistance means not, you are not a dear this close adventure is said to be squishy stay clear but tell me of anything fishy I’m in that phase where my confidence straggles stay with me dad but allow me to struggle so let me out of your strong moral’s billet or else I will turn out to be the bullet. Chorus You want the best for me but I want fun you know the path for me but no flowers your love stays too tight, I want to get loose all you see is my sky but I see Earth I need this pause for a replay later. 3. Boys, boys, boys, all that matter for me to quake scary and deep but clear and warm is this lake in the harsh weather, I have a moving fan so that on previous happiness, please unban you were once in this youthfulness currency why the hypocrisy in expectancy? I am passing through life to stay as Age’s toy so please stop your investigative envoy every bad mistake, your senses document but to my heartbreaks, please be there to unguent. Bridge Big pa is coming, coming, coming in red Oh lord I’m running, running, running in black [Repeat bridge] Chorus You want the best for me but I want fun you know the path for me but no flowers your love stays too tight, I want to get loose all you see is my sky but I see Earth I need this pause for a replay later. Published on the 5th of March. 2017

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Date: 3/5/2017 5:05:00 PM
Hi Funom. What a powerful and beautiful song. I don't have a daughter but I do have a son who is grown now but when they are at that age they all want independence. Not to worry good sir it won't last long. Anyway well done.
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Funom Makama
Date: 3/8/2017 7:03:00 AM
Thank you so much Edward McCall
Date: 3/5/2017 11:03:00 AM
ah this is so nice to read, one day she will hug you and thank you for your caring and love, this poem might not now, but later will make her smile to the moon!
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Date: 3/8/2017 7:04:00 AM
She already did. Thank you Arthur Vaso, its been a long while
Date: 3/5/2017 10:07:00 AM
I love this song :) I am a young man, I don't know the agony of fathers with daughters. But I can igamine the clashes. Great lyric, great execution.
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Funom Makama
Date: 3/8/2017 7:06:00 AM
Thank you very much Darren White

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