Pause

A tightening jaw A silent tear rolls down my cheek I remember you

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Alley Poe

Date: 5/17/2009 8:32:00 PM

I can feel the pause...Great write -Alley

Cesar Cantu

Date: 5/17/2009 8:19:00 PM

Ouch...reality does stop in moments like that one...there's when you realize how everything is a bunch of hay and maleable forks and spoons, made out of plastic, of course; thanks for sharing!!

Sharon Winter

Date: 5/17/2009 4:22:00 PM

Aww, too heartbreaking. Excellent haiku, but so very sad. Love, shar

Lena Townsend

Date: 5/17/2009 4:06:00 PM

This is a sad write my friend, but full of heart and soul. Well done. I love it. It shows so much sensitivity and so much love. You express the hurt so well here. Peace be with you. Smiles from Lolita

Christopher Higgins

Date: 5/17/2009 4:04:00 PM

This is moving my friend..a brilliant write that digs deep.

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 5/17/2009 3:18:00 PM

Sad, but beautiful, Izzy. A new side of you we see in this. Love it! Carolyn