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Owl Flight Lands From Over

Fire flies flashing light bush, a big city of light Owl flight lands from over

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Debbie Guzzi

Date: 1/24/2012 3:18:00 PM

very complex free verse bl to be a haiku it must be only 1 solitary momnet in time so you would need to stick with the fire flies, the city or the owl but putting so much into it takes it away from being a haiku, thanks so much for always stopping by my writes and YOU TOO please DO critique me! Light & Love

Sara Kendrick

Date: 1/24/2012 8:37:00 AM

Very creative Haiku..Sara

Bl Devnath
Date: 1/24/2012 8:48:00 AM

Thanks for loving my write, loved,bl

Leo Larry Amadore

Date: 1/24/2012 8:15:00 AM

The scene depicted by your first two lines are quite ingenious (I especially liked the comparison of the bush, covered with flashing fireflies, to big city lights) -- although your first line could use an additional syllable (perhaps "flashing" instead of "flash"?) Very nice.

Bl Devnath
Date: 1/24/2012 8:25:00 AM

Many thanks for reminding me, now you have made well, bl