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Out of Stocks

I bought myself, some gifts today drove home, but threw them way No big surprise, I’m losing the will offloading things, brings me thrills Again desperate, must order more getting funny looks, in the gun store Bite Size Poem no.8 Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Line Gauthier 19/06/2021

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Christopher Flaherty

Date: 6/21/2021 4:09:00 PM

Retail therapy Short lived

David Kavanagh
Date: 6/21/2021 9:52:00 PM

A nervous breakdown in the making, and the character is getting fixated with guns, need I say more, cheers David

Jenna Logan

Date: 6/19/2021 4:12:00 PM

Should I make a call for help for you, David? That's quite a bite of words.

David Kavanagh
Date: 6/19/2021 8:57:00 PM

Thanks Jenna, I’m fine, but this character I’m portraying is on the verge of a breakdown, the whole idea was to sound detached, yet menacingly volatile, the word choice is purposely unsettling, cheers David

Sotto Poet

Date: 6/19/2021 3:10:00 PM

A well-written bite-sized poem that conveys both joy and dismay. Nevertheless, we need to earn more money to regain the thrilling quality and a certain degree of self-esteem, attitude, and confidence. Have a great weekend, dear friend, and best wishes for the contest.

David Kavanagh
Date: 6/19/2021 3:27:00 PM

Thank you Lasaad, I have recently watched the falling down movie starring Michael Douglas, and was just trying to capture, the lead up to a nervous breakdown, cheers David, right back at you for the weekend