Our Star the Sun

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Our Star The Sun
We hither, simultaneously exposed, upon this earth go merrily around it, As a star amidst the number's relinquished half of the energetic lifetime, Life well-spent, we're part of its reciprocal beneficiaries earning a profit, Business, as usual, might be its script, nonetheless, survival be sublime, Truth is betold in chaptered verses, its inception in trailing breaths emit, Our symbiotic relevance, correctly, born to an unknown future only time, Pans out that a tale be realized, and venture should a future time permit, Transport said souls, whatever we and others have enjoined a paradigm, Prognosis ne'er descends well, forever is a measured interim, ne'er befit, A permanent residence, as is, for a phasing bold chapter, be anew climb, The essence of us presently possess both flee and flight, have a go at it, Perchance by way of evidence be naught in the stars played pantomime, Guesstimates permeate our baffled faculties, observationally its cockpit, Muted by our scaled pretenses that limit our conjecturing via fault crime, Sorts regulated support of vast liken stars, gathered data do at its tidbit, Its wayward subtle glide per universe, few of us begs a ride of its prime, Indistinct, effortlessly wanderings about, tagging star via hooked outfit.
2020 March 14

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Date: 3/15/2020 2:57:00 PM
Nicely done for the contest. I enjoyed the formatting as well, and the way you rhymed your lines. Here is the part that most caught my eye: Guesstimates permeate our baffled faculties. There is so much of the universe and of our current situation even with facing a virus that all baffles humanity.
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Date: 3/15/2020 4:05:00 PM
Grateful for your stop and read, as well as, your intriguing comment--many thanks, Andrea -- Aloha!~@wk
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