One Wish Granted

~~~
Entranced through castle window
arms outstretched ...
but resting on its frame
The only sound that falls to ear
from a pendulum's rhythmic swing
~
A gentle flame
sends ghostly shadows
that dance to silent notes
Entwined in scents from fireside
inlaid with cherry smoke
~
They said she would appear this night
as all the stars align
I drank their potion
said the chant
Still dispirited
counting time
~
The hour's close
near darkest night
a looking glass beside me
hand crafted by the little folk
ornate with sprigs of ivy
~
Enchanted ... yes ... they cannot lie
my wish they guarantee
Their word's been kept
since dawning time
One minute more ...
we'll see
~
A deafening thunder breaks the still
as lightning strikes the spires
From gentle breeze
to baleful gale
dare never
to think them liars
~
The ancient mirror begins to glow
as the clock counts off the trials
My heart explodes
beneath my chest
with the force of a billion smiles
~
" Take my hand ...
while the clock still strikes "
your voice pleads ... from inside
To my surprise
I reach within
with both arms open wide
~
Your loving touch
and I'm pulled through time
to your kiss
oh ... sweet embrace
A whirling swirling rainbow ride
as the tears roll down my face
~
" To the end of time ... I beg of you
Never leave these loving arms "
"Ohh...
but there's one more task
you must fulfil
if you wish to win my charms "
~
With sprawling thud ... I hit the grass
spinning senses in a daze
A newborn sunlight
warms my face
sparkling air
helps lift the haze
~
Such marvels
cast 
this wondrous world
a voice sings with a smile
~
... " You must catch me " ...
rings your taunting laugh
from a glade
nearly half a mile
~~~
July 23, 2000

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Date: 4/4/2015 7:57:00 AM
A very very beautiful poem. Definitely a 7!
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Date: 5/5/2014 3:41:00 AM
I always feel like I step into the middle of an idyllic netherworld when I read your stuff Rex ...in the most fantastically amazing of ways....love your work fella ...
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Date: 2/4/2014 7:34:00 PM
You are very talented, I really enjoyed this superb piece. Congratulations.
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Date: 2/7/2014 4:40:00 PM
Thank you Richard... Your comment certainly brings a smile :)
Date: 2/4/2014 11:50:00 AM
Lovely write! Big congrats on your winning poem!!
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Date: 2/7/2014 4:39:00 PM
Thank you Abdulhafe... I was happy to find it placed so well in this contest against so many beautifully written pieces :)
Date: 2/4/2014 6:21:00 AM
Enjoyed your write on castle and congrats on the win, Rex
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Date: 2/7/2014 4:36:00 PM
Thank you Dr. Ram... The castle theme came through as a little too secondary I guess :)
Date: 2/4/2014 12:23:00 AM
hi Rex very enjoyable poem expertly penned congrats on placing ty for entering Shadow x smile hug
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Date: 2/7/2014 4:33:00 PM
Thank you Shadow... Glad you enjoyed this piece :)
Date: 1/31/2014 8:04:00 PM
Absolutely beautiful
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Date: 2/7/2014 4:31:00 PM
Thank you Agnes... I'm glad you enjoyed it :)
Date: 1/28/2014 2:51:00 PM
REX, CONGRATULATIONS, for making the top, hottest, and the best NEW poets list on the Poetry Soup. I'm happy for you. ~ LOVE ~ SKAT
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Date: 2/7/2014 4:29:00 PM
Thankyou Skat... I had no idea I had made it onto this list. Still new here and not as active as I should be :)
Date: 1/23/2014 7:09:00 PM
Poetry at peak ; right words for loving moment . Thank goodness this is a promise kept , I pray the second demand is met also. Beautiful one Rex. Kayod5
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Date: 1/26/2014 4:07:00 PM
Part two... May be in the works :) thankyou
Date: 1/22/2014 1:54:00 PM
This is a very interesting poem full of true feeling
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Date: 1/26/2014 4:10:00 PM
Thanks Katherine... I'm a bit of a dreamer at times, but it love to bring a smile :)
Date: 1/22/2014 12:35:00 PM
- Rex, this is both touching and beautiful - Everyone needs love .... all searching for love. - A really well written poem, greatly appreciate this poem. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 1/26/2014 4:13:00 PM
Thanks Anne-Lise... I enjoy writing a poem with a bit of a story to it :)
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