One Night

Alone, she noticed footsteps. Her heart thumping, pulse racing, She looked over her shoulder. A hulking dark shape. A man. She walked faster. So did he. Heavy breathing. Smell of beer. Her heart missed a beat. He pounced… Jack Horne, 9th November, for Nette’s Silhouette of a Heptagonet contest

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Paul Callus

Date: 11/25/2014 3:59:00 PM

Great build-up, Jack! Looking forward to part two!! ...but it does not have to end the way we are expecting! // paul

Meg Anderson

Date: 11/19/2014 12:57:00 PM

I love the way it leaves you hanging...

Victoria Anderson-Throop

Date: 11/17/2014 11:05:00 PM

alistic and frightening...The fear of every night i have ever lived in a city. That is my phobia! You have certainly captured it I am back online again. Victoria

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 11/10/2014 10:01:00 AM

Wow, terrifying Jack! One of my worst fears told. Good luck in Nette's contest...love and blessings, Rhonda

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/10/2014 12:22:00 AM

oh, Jack, leave it to you to do a stalker or vampire type poem on night theme. You are so funny!! By the way, the dog I wrote of was Ollyver, my best loved doggie that I had to give up years ago. It is definitely not that crazy Snickers!!

Robert Johnson

Date: 11/9/2014 11:18:00 PM

Interesting how the format plays out. You did awesome with it. I'm ready for chapter two. I hope she took one of those self defense classes and beats the @#%$&@$, sorry, got carried away. :) Peace. :)

Eve Roper

Date: 11/9/2014 6:35:00 PM

I walk my dog, I hope when the time arrives he will protect me. Good write Jack :) hugs eve

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 11/9/2014 5:35:00 PM

the fear creeps of the page then wham right between the eyes Jack really good pen gl in contest glad you enjoyed mine hugs

Jan Allison

Date: 11/9/2014 3:25:00 PM

wow Jack I love your take on the theme - this should do really well for you - had me hooked from the start to the end:-) Hugs Jan xx

Sara Kendrick

Date: 11/9/2014 3:00:00 PM

Very exciting Heptagonet which reads like a winner...Way to go..Such difference in the interperation of the picture..I have read some interesting ones today..Thanks for the visits to my page..Sara