One More Try

All of my attempts have failed
Everyone can see
My plans were so detailed
But I still have my afternoon tea

Could I give it one more go
Would anybody even care

I know I am a mess
I've tried to be better
I'll just pick my favorite dress

I'll try to leave tomorrow
I hope it works this time

Would it matter at all
I'm on my knees
I know how to crawl

No need to remind me
I'll give it one more try
I'll become one with the sea
Maybe then I'll fly

*Written on April 24, 2012*

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012



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Date: 4/30/2012 11:23:00 AM
Lovely with much depth Lily.......One more try...and then another and another if need be, for the depth of emotion in disappointment is surpassed by the overwhelming joys beyond it...... All the best.........Walter
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Date: 4/24/2012 10:40:00 AM
Yes, give it one more try Lily.....well written. - oxox love Anne-Lise
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Lily Mayfield
Date: 4/24/2012 10:47:00 AM
I was talking about suicide... But I always say that everyone sees someones piece of work in a different way. I'm happy that for you it was a happy side. And I appreciate your read and comment :) -Lily <3
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