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One More Try

All of my attempts have failed Everyone can see My plans were so detailed But I still have my afternoon tea Could I give it one more go Would anybody even care I know I am a mess I've tried to be better I'll just pick my favorite dress I'll try to leave tomorrow I hope it works this time Would it matter at all I'm on my knees I know how to crawl No need to remind me I'll give it one more try I'll become one with the sea Maybe then I'll fly *Written on April 24, 2012*

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Walter Williams

Date: 4/30/2012 11:23:00 AM

Lovely with much depth Lily.......One more try...and then another and another if need be, for the depth of emotion in disappointment is surpassed by the overwhelming joys beyond it...... All the best.........Walter

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 4/24/2012 10:40:00 AM

Yes, give it one more try Lily.....well written. - oxox love Anne-Lise

Lily Mayfield
Date: 4/24/2012 10:47:00 AM

I was talking about suicide... But I always say that everyone sees someones piece of work in a different way. I'm happy that for you it was a happy side. And I appreciate your read and comment :) -Lily <3