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This is a work of fiction in which I needed to use five specific words given by the sponsor in just five lines of a poem. I never had a honeymoon at all, and I am married 44 years later!

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Once upon a time, we traveled around Europe very far. It was our honeymoon, and on a train inside the comfort of our room in the sleeping car, you popped the cork and toasted to everlasting love with our champagne. Long years we tried to make it work, but now alone I travel (and by plane). Dec. 1, 2019 for Beth Evans' Five Word Challenge Poetry Contest (I chose English Quintain style because it allows you to use any number of syllables you like per line while sticking to a/b/a/b/b rhyme scheme.)

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Date: 12/8/2019 8:35:00 AM
Congrats on your winning poem Andrea
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Date: 12/5/2019 5:30:00 AM
Awesome poem, tinged in sadness
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Date: 12/5/2019 4:54:00 AM
Beautifully done. I enjoyed thinking of "no honeymoon" and married 44 years later. We had no honeymoon and have been married 48 years.
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Date: 12/3/2019 2:37:00 PM
Well done, Andrea! Your poem flows very smoothly. I had a hard time with mine, perhaps because I assumed that I had to use a prompt word in each line!! ~ Regards // paul
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 12/3/2019 3:30:00 PM
I sure hope that was not a rule!
Date: 12/2/2019 12:14:00 AM
After posting my Epigram I found you have also used champagne in your poem which is very nice.
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Date: 12/1/2019 8:40:00 PM
Nice! You did well, Andrea!
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Date: 12/1/2019 7:34:00 PM
Great write Andrea, you do romance and forms so well...i wish i excelled more in forms...you rock my friend :) hugs
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Date: 12/1/2019 5:30:00 PM
Hello Andrea Dietrich, You are married 44 years! Wow! I hope you do well in the contest. have a nice evening my friend.
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Date: 12/1/2019 5:21:00 PM
Hi Andrea congrats on 44 years. Best of luck in the contest. Thanks for sharing this
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Date: 12/1/2019 4:36:00 PM
I can relate, hopefully not for much longer...train might be romantic once but I'm with you on plane.
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Date: 12/1/2019 4:36:00 PM
Well-written, Andrea--bittersweet. Janice
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Date: 12/1/2019 4:26:00 PM
Well done Andrea--enjoyed the read.
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Date: 12/1/2019 4:21:00 PM
At least you were able to enjoy an honeymoon; many couples don't get that! Aloha! Rico
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 12/1/2019 4:26:00 PM
I should probably write in the notes: totally made up.

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