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On Viewing Death

Few times have I peered closely down at death. The first time I remember fairly well (looking down at a body with no breath) would be the viewing of brother Dale. Disfigured from a crash – his face, a shell - was not the face of joy we all had known. His soul to heaven had already flown. My father’s face last year I looked down on: a look of plastic – it was not his own! He too has flown where all live on and on. Jan. 3, 2019 For Lu Loo's 'How Death Has Affected Me' Poetry Contest Note: The way I say Dale is like the word Dell, so that is why I use it in the B rhyme scheme part of this Dizain: ABABBCCDCD (Sorry i could not put much emotion into this, Laura. Death does not affect me terribly hard emotionally because I truly believe we move on to a better place. The loss of DAle when he was still so young affected me because I loved him so much that I missed not being able to reach out to him any more, but I would need more lines to write about that. Thanks for the inspiration!)

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Date: 1/11/2020 10:59:00 PM
Back to say congrats on your placement, my friend ~ John
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Date: 1/11/2020 7:28:00 PM
this one touched me as i too lost my brother... congratulations on your win my friend :) hugs
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Date: 1/11/2020 12:19:00 PM
this makes me sad because I know the pain of losing a sibling. You are so strong sweet Andrea, I only wish I could give you a hug one day :) Maybe? hugs to you across the miles...Congratulations on your placement and thank you for your participation. x:-)-luloo
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 1/12/2020 2:11:00 PM
yes, hopefully one day we can meet, Lu Loo!! I left a question for you in Soupmail about your name!
Date: 1/4/2020 6:07:00 PM
Andrea, your reflection on the loss of loved ones is a comfort. Remembering that the soul has flown to a far better place is an important part of the grieving process. Thank you. I'm sorry for your loss, but glad you are at peace. Hugs ~ J
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Date: 1/4/2020 2:57:00 PM
Indeed a tragic verse Andrea, I'm sorry to hear that of your brother. Tom
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Date: 1/4/2020 10:25:00 AM
Death takes its toll on us in different ways..Your verse depicts the "mask" it leaves
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Date: 1/4/2020 9:56:00 AM
Hi Andrea, I watched both my Mom and dad die at home, it was heartbreaking and heart rending, I hear you loud and clear. A true fact of life explained in a creative unique way! Blessing dear Andrea. Jennifer.
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Date: 1/4/2020 7:42:00 AM
Your words shape the sad feelings this evokes, Andrea--these verses on death reign in grief. A winning poem.
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Date: 1/3/2020 10:23:00 PM
Hello Andrea … it's not a pleasant time at all especially if it is someone close. We always recall our final viewing for the rest of our life - thank you Andrea - Lindsay
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Date: 1/3/2020 9:51:00 PM
This is beautifully done and truly sad...
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Date: 1/3/2020 7:45:00 PM
Sorry for both of your losses. To lose a sibling so young must have been devastating.
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Date: 1/3/2020 4:33:00 PM
Such a sad poem, but a fine tribute to your brother Dale, Andrea. I know how much this loss hurt you. Seeing "death" is the most unpleasant experience some of us have. Wishing you success in the contest, my friend! Hugs, Carolyn
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