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On Track

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On Track

cheese lies on the floor
mouse makes his way to the cheese
cat runs for the mouse

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012

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Date: 1/30/2012 8:18:00 PM
Like Debra Tom and Jerry came to mind right away...LOL!
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Date: 1/30/2012 6:18:00 PM
Made me smile. Thank you. Jim
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Date: 1/30/2012 8:33:00 AM
My mind went immediately to Tom and Jerry !! Enjoyed !!
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Date: 1/29/2012 8:58:00 PM
what a witty haiku! straight on the track. thank you for stopping by and your kind comments Carol. truly sorry i missed your soupmail from long ago.
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Date: 1/29/2012 7:44:00 AM
Simple but fantastic imagery, loved and enjoyed,bl
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Date: 1/28/2012 2:39:00 PM
Great images with words........George
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Date: 1/28/2012 1:20:00 PM
LOL, yes, I can picture this one! Thanks, Carol - enjoyed the contest
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Date: 1/28/2012 6:17:00 AM
Haha....enjoyed this haiku very much Carol.
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Date: 1/27/2012 9:04:00 PM
I once wrote about cheese but this really made me smile , thank you Carol Hugs Declan xx
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Date: 1/27/2012 8:38:00 PM
haha, remember that song, the mouse takes the cheese? Kind of reminds me of that. CUTE title for this!
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Date: 1/27/2012 5:40:00 PM
And the chase is on. Good job here Carol. You paint quite a cute picture. God Bless, JB
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Date: 1/27/2012 5:10:00 PM
this is a very interesting poem. has lots of action. did the mouse get away?? Hope you have a very, berry weekend. Take care lol, Jancarl
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Date: 1/27/2012 4:54:00 PM
There should be a cholesterol warning on the mouse...)
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Date: 1/27/2012 4:54:00 PM
This is so cute. I can picture this scene in my head. Love it. Thank you for all your kind, encouraging comments. God Bless. Love, Kim
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Date: 1/27/2012 4:50:00 PM
I find this a very appealing, "though cheesy" write Carol" ( ha ha )....Its got that mature taste," 'can't help these comments..!
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Date: 1/27/2012 3:48:00 PM
Wonder who will be the winner?..Will it be the one with the longest legs or possibly the lightest weight?...Enjoyed reading and then letting the questions flow...Sara
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Date: 1/27/2012 2:48:00 PM
LOL This is adorable, Carol! Love it. Love you as well, Carolyn
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Date: 1/27/2012 2:30:00 PM
Can we say TRAP!! Great creative poem Carol! Awesome Work!!
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