Mohan Chutani Poet Verse

On the Pier

I sit on the pier sad
Imagine I was sun
Solitary, no one
near it, shuns all.

tired evening sun lowers
sea embraces it slow
the salt lessens sun’s glow
it cools in dark.

night sings a lullaby
music plays on the tide
mermaids merrily glide
it must rise strong. 




Mohan Chutani
Date: 8.7.2014
used www.howmanysyllables.com as syl counter
1stanza (6,6,6,4)X3
rhyme: abbc
Contest: On the pier

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Dr. Upma A. Sharma July 15, 2014 at 5:16 AM Amazing write Mohan n a Wonderful win ! Huge congrats! Mohan Chutani July 15, 2014 at 10:26 AM Thanks Upma for the constant support of my poems. Mohan

John Lawless July 14, 2014 at 8:26 PM Nicely done Mohan. My favorite lines are the start of the third stanza "night sings a lullaby, music plays on the tide". congrats not the win Mohan Chutani July 15, 2014 at 10:28 AM John, thanks for appreciating, win or no win. Mohan

Arlene Smith July 14, 2014 at 3:07 PM Congrats on a great win with this delightful write! Hugs, Mohan my friend.. Arlene Mohan Chutani July 15, 2014 at 10:30 AM Arlene, thanks for liking and warm wishes. Mohan

Faye Gibson July 14, 2014 at 2:51 PM Mohan, this is delightful and a totally unexpected take on the contest them. Congratulations. Mohan Chutani July 15, 2014 at 10:32 AM Thanks, Faye. I thought that the pier is generally cheerful in the evening but a somber atmosphere does exist in nature simultaneously which could be highlighted. Mohan

Nette Onclaud July 14, 2014 at 2:44 PM deeply, truly engaging melody...this deserves a fine place in my contest... sweet congrats and huggs , mohan. Mohan Chutani July 15, 2014 at 10:34 AM Thanks Nette, for your placement again and your warm wishes as ever. Mohan

Jan Allison July 14, 2014 at 12:10 PM You painted a wonderful picture Mohan a well deserved win! Hugs Jan xxx Mohan Chutani July 15, 2014 at 10:34 AM Thanks Jan for your warm support. Mohan

Casarah Nance July 8, 2014 at 7:52 PM Aw good one my friend, the pier is gonna be a popular place tonight :) Mohan Chutani July 12, 2014 at 9:43 AM Thanks for the like, Casarah. Mohan

Deb Wilson July 8, 2014 at 3:49 PM I can imagine being in this lovely scene !very nice piece...love, Deb Mohan Chutani July 12, 2014 at 9:43 AM Deb, thanks for dropping by and encouraging. Mohan