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On the Pier

I sit on the pier sad Imagine I was sun Solitary, no one near it, shuns all. tired evening sun lowers sea embraces it slow the salt lessens sun’s glow it cools in dark. night sings a lullaby music plays on the tide mermaids merrily glide it must rise strong. Mohan Chutani Date: 8.7.2014 used www.howmanysyllables.com as syl counter 1stanza (6,6,6,4)X3 rhyme: abbc Contest: On the pier

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Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 7/15/2014 5:16:00 AM

Amazing write Mohan n a Wonderful win ! Huge congrats!

Mohan Chutani
Date: 7/15/2014 10:26:00 AM

Thanks Upma for the constant support of my poems. Mohan

John Lawless

Date: 7/14/2014 8:26:00 PM

Nicely done Mohan. My favorite lines are the start of the third stanza "night sings a lullaby, music plays on the tide". congrats not the win

Mohan Chutani
Date: 7/15/2014 10:28:00 AM

John, thanks for appreciating, win or no win. Mohan

Arlene Smith

Date: 7/14/2014 3:07:00 PM

Congrats on a great win with this delightful write! Hugs, Mohan my friend.. Arlene

Mohan Chutani
Date: 7/15/2014 10:30:00 AM

Arlene, thanks for liking and warm wishes. Mohan

Faye Gibson

Date: 7/14/2014 2:51:00 PM

Mohan, this is delightful and a totally unexpected take on the contest them. Congratulations.

Mohan Chutani
Date: 7/15/2014 10:32:00 AM

Thanks, Faye. I thought that the pier is generally cheerful in the evening but a somber atmosphere does exist in nature simultaneously which could be highlighted. Mohan