Maurice Yvonne Poet Verse

On the Good Ship Lollypop

Rats on board,
there are bodies rotting,
reek, permeates our so called dwelling.
The oxygen is thin, death has the best seat here.
Blood rolls down one man's lip. He knows we all see it's not his own.
The ship is sailing to a new land, laying on top of the dead is hope.




24~12~2014
Maurice Yvonne
Sponsor: nette onclaud
Contest Name: ENCHANTMENT THROUGH A PRISM 
 2. Don’t Stop Believing—U2

used www.howmanysyllables.com for an accurate count
6 lines of 3, 6, 9, 12, 15, 18 syllables 

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Dr.Ram Mehta January 1, 2015 at 2:43 AM Happy new year, Maurice , and congrats on the win

Earl Schumacker December 31, 2014 at 6:08 AM Hi Maurice, Before I started to write my comments I instantly registered a 7 for this stunning item. Nice juxtaposition of title to subject matter. Brilliant images with just the right flavor and hint of vampire activity. Very clever language usage in your dark prism. A well deserved win. Good for you. Have a prosperous and very Happy New Year. I wish you the best of the best. Earl

Sandra Haight December 30, 2014 at 2:55 PM Congratulations on your win, Maurice! I love your last word, "Hope!" No matter how bad things are, there is always that thought! Best wishes to you and yours for a wonderful New Year. Sandra

Robert Stoner Jr December 30, 2014 at 2:13 PM Maurice well done another fine win

Paul Callus December 30, 2014 at 1:30 PM Congratulations on a worthy win, Maurice (or should I say Armand!). This is a powerfully dark picture you present us with; but hope will fill the sails to bring the ship to shore. Do I see a slight tinge of personification here? // paul

Brenda Meier-Hans December 30, 2014 at 1:08 PM LOL, I can't believe I just took a bite of a sandwich before I read this. I almost spit it out. Congratulations on your win Maurice.

Kayod5 Kayode December 30, 2014 at 11:30 AM Never mind Maurice,God has a way of protecting his People,this ship will not capsize, it shall berth safely at port . Congrats on the win and happy new year my friend...huggs

Jan Allison December 30, 2014 at 11:21 AM Dropping back with my congrats Armand:-) Hugs jan xxx

M. L. Kiser December 27, 2014 at 2:43 PM I think that the "lollypop" has become petrified. Good luck in the contest.

Jan Allison December 26, 2014 at 9:36 AM I found this so deep dark and sad but with hope on the horizon - unique take as ever my friend - good luck:-) Hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich December 24, 2014 at 11:00 AM and here is another comment for good measure. with a seven attached.

Andrea Dietrich December 24, 2014 at 11:00 AM wow, this is a powerful one~~ very different from the ones being posted generally! the last line was so cool though. PUtting hope into it. the contrast of theme with title was really good, Maurice. I love how you chose that title!!