On Arrival

coming coming coming
to winterize
old jack frost
with sleepy eyes
a draft, a chill, a cold cold breeze
enough to make the strongest sneeze

slowly slowly slowly
they freeze
the rain, water, wind and knee's
stiffening already fallen leaves
brittle they crumble with ease

staying staying staying
for a while
old jack frost till he tires
give the tree's and ground a rest
let them sleep and sleep there best

gone gone gone
our paradise
our summers green into wintery scene
no more swimming but skating the fad
there's still so much fun to be had
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Thekidster Avatar
December 21, 2010 at 7:08 AM
I'll tend my fire with kindling and draw the blankets to my chin and I'll lock the vagrant winter out and alter my wandering in. I'd like to call back summertime and have her stay for just another month or so but she got the urge for going and I guess she'll have to go. - Great Write John - *TheKidsterWasHere*
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December 8, 2010 at 7:17 AM
Good morning, John the sun is shining to bright in my face right now. I can't feel the coldness of my being. But, hopefully heaven lets me reach the fun, after all life is only an experience. Might as well try to enjoy it. The sand the dreams, and Mr. Jack Frost. The funny thing is, I'm not going to enjoy the skating fad. Texas has no ice ponds.. And its Miss Jack Frost that took a visit down here. And she does not like to freeze our *behinds off*. lol..She kinda likes us,,kidding,..p.d.
Kendrick Avatar
December 5, 2010 at 4:46 AM
Excellent one ...Enjoyed reading this expressive and descriptive work..Hope everything is going well..Sara
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December 1, 2010 at 7:12 PM
Really can feel the chilly snow reading your poem john. wonderfully put to welcome winter. thanks for stopping by and happy holidays :D
Wellington Avatar
December 1, 2010 at 7:38 AM
You got that right buddy, the knees are stiffening my friend, O go go go away winter, come again spring and summer to stay. I wish! Thanks for your comments and advice my friend, that we will have to do. If the mountain won't come to Muhammed then Muhammed has to go to the mountain, right? Got you. Will do soon. Love and blessings. Joy (Jew)
Kaabour Avatar
December 1, 2010 at 12:36 AM
Thanks for making me experience winter through your poem. This one surely gave me the chills. In the Middle East, our definition of "winter" is a bit of wind at mid-day. The rest of the day will be 35 degrees Celsius, haha! Love, Maya =)
Dietrich Avatar
November 30, 2010 at 11:22 PM
this is great fun to read. I love this kind of poem and you did Jack frost justice! Luv, Andrea
Scoville Avatar
November 30, 2010 at 1:42 PM
Aww thank you Mr Loving. You made me really see Jack Frost. Thank you ever so much for the chill that is now in my bones..as always it is a pleasure to read your work...The Southern Belle
Devonshire Avatar
November 30, 2010 at 11:38 AM
Oh, I love the wonderful upbeat tone of the last verse, John. I think you have weathered the storms life has brought your way admirably. Jack Frost can stay in the freezer; your warm heart would make him melt. Truly one of your best poems!! Love and blessings, Carolyn
Bloomsfield Avatar
November 30, 2010 at 7:38 AM
I wish to meet old jack frost :). .lol. Great poem.How are you John?hope better.
Puddifoot Avatar
November 30, 2010 at 5:15 AM
nice to see a lighter write from you, and always remember winter's sparkle holds the promise of a green and pleasant spring...x
Sweetheart Avatar
November 29, 2010 at 8:06 PM
Nice presentation John with the repeating words in each verse.. and a grand description of the winter chill which has already arrived here ... enjoyed tonight with luv..
Richards Avatar
November 29, 2010 at 6:02 PM
Old Jack Frost paid us a visit this morning....just as you described!!! Nice one, John!
Babcock Avatar
November 29, 2010 at 1:03 PM
HEY do you see these old bones on this chilly winter's breeze. Getting more snow today the stuff does not want to end. OH YEAH we lost the game to Montreal. phyl
Brown Avatar
November 29, 2010 at 11:47 AM
May your week bring you good health,may your heart overflow with love, and may your life bring you amazing inspiration to continue your writing. I enjoyed reading your wonderful poetry this morning and thank you for sharing it John iii. Love, Carol
Onclaud Avatar
November 29, 2010 at 11:10 AM
a delightful piece with repetitive words singing, john... enthralled! if this is for the contest, i wish you a big win! warmest, nette
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