On a Winter's Day Anacreontic Couplet

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contest Aracreontic Couplets

sponsor Silent One

You came on a winter's day tried to take my pain away your gift of love and desire you tried to light my dead fire I was cold to your embrace my heart had turned a blank space days are now a grayer veil that hangs on my heart of brail seen the sun, and watched it fall heard the sound when hearts grew small love is gone and left no trace my yesterdays were misplaced I crossed a bridge, left my pride found someone for love to hide you're a friend to share a need my heartache you won't impede

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Susan Ashley

Date: 1/12/2024 5:20:00 PM

Dear friend, dear poet, the pulsing heartache is potent and palpable. "my heart had turned a blank space" and "seen the sun, and watched it fall" and "my yesterdays were misplaced" - wow! There is deep beauty in sadness and your poetic pen has captured that, Frederic. Congratulations for your wonderful win in Silent One's contest. It's a pleasure to share the podium with you. Warmest wishes to you for a happy, healthy and creative 2024.. ~Susan

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 1/3/2024 7:30:00 PM

Congratulations, Frederick!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/3/2024 10:06:00 AM

So beautiful. Congrats.

Silent One

Date: 1/1/2024 10:47:00 AM

Wonderful storytelling Frederic.. flows and rhymes so well.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest..

Ink Empress

Date: 12/21/2023 9:47:00 AM

Wow this is brilliant frederick and i can resonate with this so deeply and strongly. I absolutely love the rhymes and the depth of this poem. Sometimes on coldest of days we meet someone that changes everything and gives us a purpose and places light in our sight and heart. Pleasure reading this. I think this will do very well in the contest. I definitively loved it. A fave for me this is