Oceans of Awareness

Rippled ribbons of wavy sand
Caressed and created by the oceans hand
Salted wisps of fragrant air
Stirring my nose and tickling my hair
Bellowing sounds of the breaking tides
The ever-changeable textures on a shell on both sides  





Inspired by Deborah Guzzi's contest five senses / five elements
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009

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March 13, 2009 at 6:04 PM
~I love this write Laura very much so!!!~And, although I am somewhat in a bit of a hurry right now~I shall look forward to coming back by again tomorrow to visit "You," and view more of Your wonderful writings!!!~"My Love To 'You & Your Loves Always,' John!!!:"~" Goodnight Dear Laura:):)
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March 13, 2009 at 5:58 PM
This sounds like home to myself dear! Smile~ And, "You" flatter me dear, "Precious & Gifted Laura Mckenzie!!!"~This is such a peaceful and beautiful write here Laura!!! Yes, the ocean is a very enchanting and wonderful place....And Your write here dear, was painted as lovely as it is! But also, it revealed a reflection I believe, of the true beauty which resides inside of its writer~Smile~But I always knew "You Were/Are Beautiful Inside!!!"....cont....
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March 13, 2009 at 3:56 PM
Truely Magnificant dear Laura! I could almost feel the sand beneath my feet and smell the salty ocean atmosphere! Lovely poem! Keep writing! I shall read! Much love, ~Catherine:)
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March 13, 2009 at 1:01 PM
Laura, your poem truly transports me to the beach. Love the way you describe "Rippled ribbons of wavy sand." Very clever observation. Best wishes in the contest! Love, Carolyn
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March 13, 2009 at 12:42 PM
I love the simplicity and sense of peace in this lovely poem....yet so fullfilling the five senses and elements! A perfect entry....best wishes in the contest, Laura! Love, Carrie
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March 13, 2009 at 12:10 PM
Wow! A most excellent entry. This is so perfect Laura. Your imagery excels! Best of luck! Love, Shar
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March 13, 2009 at 11:29 AM
Beautiful imagery, I can almost smell the salt filled air and here the rippling waves rolling onto the beach, though I have never actually seen an ocean. You truly bring it to life with your words. Great luck to you in the contest. Smiles from Lolita
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