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Oceans of Awareness

Rippled ribbons of wavy sand Caressed and created by the oceans hand Salted wisps of fragrant air Stirring my nose and tickling my hair Bellowing sounds of the breaking tides The ever-changeable textures on a shell on both sides Inspired by Deborah Guzzi's contest five senses / five elements

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John Rhinem

Date: 3/13/2009 6:04:00 PM

~I love this write Laura very much so!!!~And, although I am somewhat in a bit of a hurry right now~I shall look forward to coming back by again tomorrow to visit "You," and view more of Your wonderful writings!!!~"My Love To 'You & Your Loves Always,' John!!!:"~" Goodnight Dear Laura:):)

John Rhinem

Date: 3/13/2009 5:58:00 PM

This sounds like home to myself dear! Smile~ And, "You" flatter me dear, "Precious & Gifted Laura Mckenzie!!!"~This is such a peaceful and beautiful write here Laura!!! Yes, the ocean is a very enchanting and wonderful place....And Your write here dear, was painted as lovely as it is! But also, it revealed a reflection I believe, of the true beauty which resides inside of its writer~Smile~But I always knew "You Were/Are Beautiful Inside!!!"....cont....

Catherine Adams

Date: 3/13/2009 3:56:00 PM

Truely Magnificant dear Laura! I could almost feel the sand beneath my feet and smell the salty ocean atmosphere! Lovely poem! Keep writing! I shall read! Much love, ~Catherine:)

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 3/13/2009 1:01:00 PM

Laura, your poem truly transports me to the beach. Love the way you describe "Rippled ribbons of wavy sand." Very clever observation. Best wishes in the contest! Love, Carolyn

Carrie Richards

Date: 3/13/2009 12:42:00 PM

I love the simplicity and sense of peace in this lovely poem....yet so fullfilling the five senses and elements! A perfect entry....best wishes in the contest, Laura! Love, Carrie

Sharon Winter

Date: 3/13/2009 12:10:00 PM

Wow! A most excellent entry. This is so perfect Laura. Your imagery excels! Best of luck! Love, Shar

Lena Townsend

Date: 3/13/2009 11:29:00 AM

Beautiful imagery, I can almost smell the salt filled air and here the rippling waves rolling onto the beach, though I have never actually seen an ocean. You truly bring it to life with your words. Great luck to you in the contest. Smiles from Lolita