Ocean

It was a beautiful evening; The moon was smiling in the sky, You have been dancing with joy Making nonstop tides with cry. It is good to stay with near and dear; Together we can make a miracle, I see the unity & leadership you have; On her way to you, river sings nice in jungle. The smile that I see in your wide face; When you welcome and goodbye the sun, It is a nice lesson to me, you, him and all; A good start always brings treasureful fun. The depth of your confidence and faith; It could not be measured by any scale, If we have that depth ocean within us; We can march ahead without any fail.

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Mario Vitale

Date: 12/11/2019 7:20:00 PM

"Really hits home to all unknown parts. Awake to the tenndency to dream to sing a tender song. As the tender lying of the fawn out on the lawm. Words that breath a nostalgic portion in its meaning. You have created a charming presentation to its flow. First off i like the line pattern to this remarkable piece. Words can uplift these are touching that you exhibit. Further, you have given a chance for the reader to breath. Let go of any harm that may come up. Very deep piece you got here. Lastly, you covered all bases very good. Poet Mario William Vitale First off you have used a great deal of grammar that is simplistic to taste. I liked the flow. Further, you have grown in your work as an artist type poet. Really liking your work. Words of nicely woven linguistic terms. Fashioned in a great experience type work you got here. Try reaching out to your fan base it may surprise you."

Manmath Dalei
Date: 12/13/2019 4:19:00 AM