Obsession Part 4

The chill of morning, children yawning,
I am tired, the blush of dawning has me
feeling ill at ease, my spirit sags,
I barely reach the second floor.
'When will you return? Is Paris so much more
than you have here?' is my unanswered question.
I drag my heels to breakfast, 
listless as a lazy dog, and nibble toast,
my countenance as pallid as a ghost.

A letter would be welcomed. 
I shall miss you; there, I've said it. 
I am your friend, are you not mine? 
Tenuous and strained, two casual 
acquaintances who share so little time,
we brush elbows, like strangers passing
on a platform, sharing sidelong glances,
afraid to say hello. I watch you as you go.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2008



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Date: 5/17/2010 10:16:00 PM
Keeping the reader interested, grasping, for what is on the next page!
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Date: 5/17/2010 10:15:00 PM
Now this is just remorse and sad.... beautifully portrayed.
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Date: 3/10/2009 3:44:00 PM
Ah, so she's in Paris, the city of romance, and you wish you could be there with her. The pain and longing in your heart are well-conveyed. Part 5 awaits!
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Date: 11/30/2008 2:34:00 AM
Love this verse, Keith, you have done Elliot's rhyme scheme very well, internal and end...next...
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Date: 11/29/2008 10:42:00 AM
Ah Keith, these thoughts embellished by the outstanding imagery...makes me want to jump into the next verse. There will be a happy ending? I am a romantic..it will make me feel dreadfully sad if this is building up to something that will crash at my feet.:( God bless you and yours!! Love, Mikki
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