Oasis

[A Pleiades consists of 7 lines, each having 6 syllables. The title consists of ONE word only (and that word will NOT be used again in the poem itself). The first word in each line begins with the same letter as the title.] Obsessed by jealousy Overwhelmed to the point Of no return, I reach Out to you for comfort Ousting repulsive thoughts Opting to replenish Our parched and arid love. - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - Pleiades “O” Contest Sponsor: Kim Merryman Placed 5th

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Brandy Nicole

Date: 5/11/2021 11:31:00 AM

*Jealousy* is One ugly trait. Those that present themselves in this way, do so, mostly due to low self esteem. There are so many reasons to be thankful, so many qualities within to appreciate about yourself. Many fail to see the truth. So sad indeed. You have expressed this emotion so beautifully my sweet friend. My heart is touched by your words. Hugs, Brandy

Paul Callus
Date: 5/20/2021 11:46:00 AM

I cherish your pleasant, complimentary and insightful feedback, Brandy Nicole....thank you! Your visit brings warmth to my page:) Regards & Hugs // paul

Ann Foster

Date: 5/11/2021 6:53:00 AM

Great fun. Excellent write. Ann

Paul Callus
Date: 5/20/2021 11:42:00 AM

Glad you enjoyed it, Ann...thank you ... and pls excuse the late reply (not receiving any notifications has put me off my stride). Regards // paul

Judy Ball

Date: 5/6/2021 12:41:00 PM

Nicely done Paul. Trouble is some people obsessed with jealousy will turn on the one they are in love with instead of the one they are jealous of. Jealousy hurts all parties. Great job here. God Bless, JB

Paul Callus
Date: 5/6/2021 12:53:00 PM

Thank you, Judy. Your insightful comments are appreciated. Blessings // paul

John Fleming

Date: 5/1/2021 10:41:00 AM

Don't have much time for poetry at the moment...much to my detriment. When I do have a spare few hours though, I like to revisit as many dignitaries as I can...hence my stopping by here. Hope I am finding you in good health, Paul. My very best regards as always! :) john

Paul Callus
Date: 5/2/2021 2:34:00 PM

I am honoured to have you stopping by, John. I have just read your dedication to Connie; you have certainly made her day. ~ So far am keeping well, thank you; hope you are, too. Best regards // paul

Quoth Theraven

Date: 4/30/2021 8:10:00 AM

Paul, Oasis, a word never to be used, perhaps never dealt. The Pleiades series seem to bring out the best in a poet's heart. -Richard

Quoth Theraven
Date: 5/5/2021 8:31:00 AM

No better use of three syllables in a single word's message. -R

Paul Callus
Date: 5/2/2021 2:56:00 PM

Thank you, Richard. Incidentally, the word "oasis" has inspired me several times! Best regards // paul

Malabika Ray Choudhury

Date: 4/28/2021 2:04:00 PM

Dear Paul, Enjoyed this Pleides, which is beautifully written. Congratulations on your win. As you always do, chose a very interesting topic and a title, "Oasis". BW ~ Mala

Paul Callus
Date: 5/2/2021 2:58:00 PM

Your sincere comments/feedback are truly appreciated, Mala...thank you. ~ Best regards // paul

Funom Makama

Date: 4/27/2021 8:07:00 PM

A big big big congratulations on your win. It is well deserved.

Paul Callus
Date: 4/28/2021 5:28:00 AM

Thank you, Funom. Regards // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 4/27/2021 8:07:00 PM

I like this a lot Paul. Congratulations on your win! I am having fun catching up on poetry. Blessings xxoo

Paul Callus
Date: 4/28/2021 5:19:00 AM

Thank you, Connie. So lovely to see you and your muse having fun together:) Regards & Blessings // paul

Kenisha Shines

Date: 4/22/2021 10:32:00 PM

Congratulations on your win!Loved your poem.Have a great day!

Paul Callus
Date: 4/27/2021 1:23:00 AM

Thank you Kenisha. May you too have a lovely and productive day. :) // paul

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 4/21/2021 10:10:00 AM

Congrats on a fine win my friend. You mentioned below that you like double visits, so I thought I'd do the same! Jennifer.

Paul Callus
Date: 4/27/2021 1:21:00 AM

So now it's my turn to say a double thank you Jenny :) You're always welcome in my humble abode :) Yes, replenishing arid love might not always work, but it's worth a try! Warm regards & Hugs // paul

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 4/21/2021 10:09:00 AM

Hi Paul, Obsessed with jealousy - opting to replenish an arid love - sometimes it does work but many a time the jealousy has too tight a hold on one. Warm regards, hugs and blessings, Jennifer.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 4/11/2021 2:27:00 PM

Whoa!! Reads like a lot of emotion going here. I hope it works out. Way to go with this winner. Congrats. Sara

Paul Callus
Date: 4/12/2021 3:26:00 PM

Thank you so much, Sara. Your visit is most welcome. Best regards // paul

Angela Crabtree

Date: 4/9/2021 5:47:00 PM

Beautifully written, Paul. Saved to my favorites :)

Paul Callus
Date: 4/11/2021 12:53:00 AM

Many thanks Angela; both the lovely compliment and the fav are truly appreciated. ~ Regards // paul

Jack Horne

Date: 4/9/2021 12:16:00 PM

I love this clever write, my friend - will have to try this form. I hope you are well

Paul Callus
Date: 4/11/2021 1:03:00 AM

Thank you, Jack. Hope you're keeping well and active. Regards // paul

Susan Ashley

Date: 4/8/2021 10:48:00 AM

Dear Paul, I love the title and the metaphorical beauty that flows from it. Sometimes a watering of jealousy is just what the garden of love needs to become a lush oasis once again. I admire your polished poetic potency, my inspiring friend. Congratulations for your wonderful win. Warmest wishes and hugs.. ~Susan

Paul Callus
Date: 4/11/2021 4:56:00 AM

Thank you, dear Susan. Your lovely, insightful feedback is most welcome and worthy to be cherished. ~ Warm regards & hugs // paul

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 4/8/2021 10:43:00 AM

Hello Paul, would I put this type of poem in a Verse form? or would it be in another form? I hope you had a nice Easter. regards Darlene. Thank you.

Paul Callus
Date: 4/10/2021 7:35:00 AM

Yes, Darlene..."Verse" should be fine Regards // paul