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Nobody Knows

The winds sit still and nobody knows the clouds gather and nothing is shown darkness takes hold and life lets go hiding of the moonlit show still nobody knows The sun makes it up to my window sill aimless I'm lost in another pill gathering myself I long to see what has overtaken me but nobody knows I'm half-way to the end but I missed the start extracting shards of failure pulling me apart broken back and peeled my signed surrender is sealed still nobody knows Cast shadows walking the other way escaping the light of day covered in cloth hidden the sin trapped in a game I couldn't win but nobody knows Against the wall erected to guard weakened and hard firing off a blank who am I to thank and I don't really know A fine line between here and gone just a peasant and a pawn don't let me check out a chalice oozing with doubt does anyone really know

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017




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Date: 1/14/2017 9:32:00 PM
Very deep and packed with emotion, Tim, different for the love and romantic poem you've written . Don't let the cold and winter season bring you down... Take that shovel and start shoveling the snow to get you thinking of love and the warm embrace of the one you love again..Hugs
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Date: 1/13/2017 10:49:00 PM
this is a great poem, Tim - this part "but nobody knows" really resonates with me... because nobody knows how we're really feeling on the inside, besides the facade we let the world see - loved it <3
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Date: 1/13/2017 3:04:00 PM
- A poem that has a deep and sincere feeling, Tim - Although it is sad it is a wonderful poem - a 7 - hugs and happy weekend :) // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 1/13/2017 2:41:00 PM
Hi Tim, I agree with them below me. This is a sad dark write. I felt the pain in each word. I have close family memembers who suffer from depression. I know first hand how it affects the one ssuffering from it.I'm often left feeling helpless because I can't do more to help them.Well done. A without doubt seven- Alexis
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Date: 1/13/2017 2:38:00 PM
Well done Tim! That really shows a lot.
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Date: 1/13/2017 12:57:00 PM
"I long to see, what has overtaken me" I love that line, it's so perfect. wonderful write! Love, Juli-Michelle
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Date: 1/13/2017 12:48:00 PM
Its sad when nobody knows about the dark cloud of the one in pain.. 'A fine line between here and gone'..So dark and deep this is Tim.
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Date: 1/13/2017 12:18:00 PM
Tim, this is sooooo beautiful..... I love this especially: I'm half-way to the end but I missed the start..//.. extracting shards of failure pulling me apart..//.. broken back and peeled..//.. my signed surrender is sealed....
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Date: 1/13/2017 12:09:00 PM
Gosh Tim I have to agree with Chris this is deep and dark It's so different to your usual style. I feel quite down reading this poem - many suffer from depression and its an issue that is hidden:-( hugs jan xx
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Darren White
Date: 1/13/2017 12:20:00 PM
Oh, I felt that pain, especially where I am still residing at the moment.... But despite all that, the poem is a beauty in itself, so wonderful.
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Tim Smith
Date: 1/13/2017 12:17:00 PM
I'm sorry Jan. I know a few friends that have depression and then I saw a movie last night about someone depressed and it stuck with me.
Date: 1/13/2017 12:00:00 PM
Tim this is so deep and dark, what a fantastic piece of writing. You have definitely pulled out the stops on this emotional beauty. Wow, I could feel this, the pain, the questions , the torment of the mind. This awesome.
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Tim Smith
Date: 1/13/2017 12:14:00 PM
Thanks Chris. I wasn't sure if the message would be understood.

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