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bats on silent wing
swoop too close for comfort in
    my personal space

Copyright © Jean Murray | Year Posted 2017

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Kai Michael Neumann

April 13, 2018 at 3:10 AM

Congratulations. When I was in the Kruger National Park, sitting under a huge wooden umbrella, I looked up. There were hundreds of bats hanging there with there young ones. It was beautiful. Many wishes, Kai

April 13, 2018 at 3:19 AM

Top of the morning Kai. My fond memory of them is twilight on Palm Island off Queensland in Australia. The sound and sight of thousands of fruit bats heading to roost in a pink sky.

Subimal Sinha-Roy

March 12, 2018 at 1:04 AM

Congratulations on your win, Jean.

March 12, 2018 at 2:28 AM

Thank you Subimal.

March 10, 2018 at 7:10 PM

Congratulations on your win ! Hugs Eve ~`*

March 11, 2018 at 1:07 AM

Thank you Eve.

March 10, 2018 at 4:36 PM

Dropping back to say many congrats on your win Jean:-) hugs Jan xx

March 10, 2018 at 4:56 PM

Thank you Jan. "You are as constant as the Northern Star" and have been a rock of support for me. Hugs.

March 10, 2018 at 3:43 PM

Congrats for your win, Jean. I found myself ducking at the end! Well done.

March 10, 2018 at 3:47 PM

Your comments are always so nice Line. Thank you.

March 10, 2018 at 3:07 PM

The dusky dread, oh dear, they are the cutest little critters, and all in danger in the UK. Non the less a great haiku! Congratulations Jean, on your placement, and many thanks for your participation... Mick

March 10, 2018 at 3:26 PM

Mick...I am always so thrilled to make it in by the skin of my teeth! Thank you so much for my placement.

March 10, 2018 at 3:05 PM

Wow ,happened to me last year in Turkey, about 3 inches from my face. Congratulations Jean

March 10, 2018 at 3:28 PM

Good evening Tom. Knowing their radar excels I fear no evil. Thank you for taking the time to comment.

September 10, 2017 at 1:50 PM

Another lovey poem, a great Haiku, Jean!

September 10, 2017 at 2:47 PM

Thank you Vijay. I have no training so I have learned all I know from the wonderful poets here on Poetrysoup.

August 29, 2017 at 12:30 PM

A wonderful Haiku Jean. Your words really make the reader feel the dusky dread. A great write :)

August 29, 2017 at 1:57 PM

How apt that I chance upon your comment just as I leave to go for a dander at dusk Susan. Thank you for your comment.

Anne-Lise Andresen

August 11, 2017 at 4:04 AM

- Keep a safe distance - Great haiku, Jean :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

August 11, 2017 at 6:19 AM

But it is so nice to dander at dusk Sunshine.

August 10, 2017 at 5:33 AM

I like this one, and I agree, although I like bats :)

August 10, 2017 at 6:10 AM

They drive me batty Darren.

Andrea Dietrich

August 9, 2017 at 6:07 PM

Very nice, Jean. If it's for a contest, some judges don'T like them capitalized or with punctuation.

August 9, 2017 at 6:24 PM

Not for contest Andrea but I took your advice and thank you.

Afolabi Muideen

August 9, 2017 at 9:55 AM

Lol! what an excellent poem.

August 9, 2017 at 11:23 AM

Why thank you...

August 9, 2017 at 9:27 AM

If such an enjoyable haiku comes out from the swoop, the discomfort is welcome! ... Great ... Btw, thanks for liking the whispers of anemone, Jean ...

August 9, 2017 at 11:22 AM

You're welcome to enjoy my discomfort Probir.

August 7, 2017 at 9:26 PM

"silent wing Swoop" has a nice sound to it.

August 8, 2017 at 3:38 AM

Hi Anita. Thank you for your visit. So it does.

August 5, 2017 at 3:09 AM

they do that... had a few to close for comfort.. nice one , Jean ~*

August 5, 2017 at 3:13 AM

Morning Eve. Thank you for you visit.

August 4, 2017 at 6:41 PM

I saw some on our Island only last week they were fluttering too close for comfort for me to jean!:-( hugs janxx

August 5, 2017 at 2:54 AM

Thankfully we only have the tiny ones Jan. It's comforting to know they will never actually smack us.

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