No Proper Goodbye

There was no closure of a proper goodbye. 
 I tried, but... 
 no reply. 

 Your body became limp and cold as 
 a corpse. 
 We froze alone 
 in different time warps. 

 My ambiguous stutters 
 wouldn't disappear. 
 They pinched as they burrowed 
 like earwigs in each ear. 

 My mouth opened slowly 
 to suck the words back in. 
 Then the dead revived 
 and embraced my skin. 

 My heart bloomed in profusion
 like first love's lilac. 
 With lips on lips 
 you took my words back.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013



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Date: 4/6/2021 4:57:00 PM
Very descriptive and expressive winner. Congrats. Way to go. Sara
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Date: 4/5/2021 8:32:00 PM
So beautifully expressed! Congratulations Juliet...This is a FAVE for me..
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Juliet Ligon
Date: 4/6/2021 7:23:00 AM
Thanks so much, JCB!
Date: 1/18/2014 9:29:00 PM
Juliet This is a clever and creative write to describe the sorrow and pain of goodbye. Nicely done. Thanks for the great comment on my Phone Call poem.
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Date: 11/23/2013 7:36:00 AM
wow intensely original! fav phrase [ like first love's lilac.] Light & Love
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Date: 10/26/2013 11:38:00 AM
Hello Juliet, stopping by this one again... such a great ending... there's never a proper way to say goodbye... luv~ LINDA
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Date: 10/23/2013 11:24:00 AM
Juliet, CONGRATS in Giorgio's awesome "Gothic or Romantic contest" enjoy your day.................... LOVE -- SKAT
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Date: 10/23/2013 7:42:00 AM
Congrats on the win in the contest, Juliet
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Date: 10/22/2013 9:49:00 PM
Nice win.. Juliet... pd
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Date: 10/22/2013 7:33:00 PM
nicely penned poem...congrats on your win :)
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Date: 10/21/2013 12:26:00 AM
Yes, damn. I understand the sharp consequences in these lines. Very, very well presented! =)
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