No Proper Goodbye

There was no closure of a proper goodbye. 
 I tried, but... 
 no reply. 

 Your body became limp and cold as 
 a corpse. 
 We froze alone 
 in different time warps. 

 My ambiguous stutters 
 wouldn't disappear. 
 They pinched as they burrowed 
 like earwigs in each ear. 

 My mouth opened slowly 
 to suck the words back in. 
 Then the dead revived 
 and embraced my skin. 

 My heart bloomed in profusion
 like first love's lilac. 
 With lips on lips 
 you took my words back.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013

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Kendrick Avatar
April 6, 2021 at 4:57 PM
Very descriptive and expressive winner. Congrats. Way to go. Sara
Brul Avatar
April 5, 2021 at 8:32 PM
So beautifully expressed! Congratulations Juliet...This is a FAVE for me..
Ligon Avatar
April 6, 2021 at 7:23 AM
Thanks so much, JCB!
Davis Avatar
January 18, 2014 at 9:29 PM
Juliet This is a clever and creative write to describe the sorrow and pain of goodbye. Nicely done. Thanks for the great comment on my Phone Call poem.
Guzzi Avatar
November 23, 2013 at 7:36 AM
wow intensely original! fav phrase [ like first love's lilac.] Light & Love
A   Avatar
October 26, 2013 at 11:38 AM
Hello Juliet, stopping by this one again... such a great ending... there's never a proper way to say goodbye... luv~ LINDA
A  Avatar
October 23, 2013 at 11:24 AM
Juliet, CONGRATS in Giorgio's awesome "Gothic or Romantic contest" enjoy your day.................... LOVE -- SKAT
Mehta Avatar
October 23, 2013 at 7:42 AM
Congrats on the win in the contest, Juliet
A   Avatar
October 22, 2013 at 9:49 PM
Nice win.. Juliet... pd
Adams Avatar
October 22, 2013 at 7:33 PM
nicely penned poem...congrats on your win :)
Tacito Avatar
October 21, 2013 at 12:26 AM
Yes, damn. I understand the sharp consequences in these lines. Very, very well presented! =)
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