Joseph May Poet Couplet

No More Fun

As a Christmas gift  he got a gun
He played with it and had lots of fun

To a little boy it was such joy
To have  it as a toy

But when the boy became a man
Things didn't go as he had planned

And so this young man got a gun
A single shot, his life was done

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Andrea Dietrich February 26, 2013 at 4:46 PM Yours was my favorite of the couplets because it packed such a PUNCH in such few lines. Congrats, Joseph. (it reminded me of the style of one of my favorite poems Richard Cory)

Bukang Liwayway February 26, 2013 at 11:20 AM a very informative poem friend Joseph, thanks for sharing and Big Congratulations on your grand win. Cheers!! Maria

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl February 26, 2013 at 10:37 AM Many congratulations on your number 1 Joseph xx

Poet Destroyer A February 25, 2013 at 9:07 PM Joseph, Congratulations with your winning poem in Rix's "A "Gun"-o-ku " contest. Goodnight~ LINDA

Andrea Dietrich January 27, 2013 at 5:23 PM rereading this one. Sure hope to see it on the winners list.

Audrey Haick January 26, 2013 at 8:12 PM This is so relevant, Joseph. And I can't help but wonder if the truth is so hard to see or are the advocates just digging their feet in the mud. Very well done! Best wishes for the Winners' List! Always, Annalise

Andrea Dietrich January 26, 2013 at 12:57 PM This is a nicely dramatic one on the topic of why guns are bad!! I enjoyed it.

Anne-Lise Andresen January 25, 2013 at 2:17 PM In Norway, we have strict rules for weapons, and that should every country have - Good luck in the contest. - Have a wonderful weekend. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

Debbie Guzzi January 25, 2013 at 7:25 AM Happens way too much, even one lost soul is too much. Light & Love