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Nightfall In the Woods

nightfall in the woods field mouse scurries on the ground an eagle takes flight snowflakes gathering pine boughs droop beneath the weight hatchlings to be fed

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Caren Krutsinger

Date: 10/22/2021 12:40:00 AM

The field mouse is so true of the forest; I live in a forest and can testify to it.

Jenna Logan
Date: 10/22/2021 7:50:00 AM

Thanks for visiting me, Caren.

Tania Kitchin

Date: 10/17/2021 4:56:00 PM

Jenna, I did not see the original version but I really like this one, love the raptor imagery! hugs

Jenna Logan
Date: 10/18/2021 10:49:00 AM

Thanks for reading me, Tania. My original version was not appreciated so I rewrote these lines to my liking.

David Kavanagh

Date: 10/17/2021 4:35:00 AM

Heya Jenna, I see we where both on the same wavelength, feeding the chicks, you went for the picturesque, I the visceral, the main thing is the blighters got fed, wonderful harsh winter imagery, brilliant haiku, cheers David

Jenna Logan
Date: 10/17/2021 6:32:00 AM

I’m smiling. ;)

David Kavanagh
Date: 10/17/2021 6:02:00 AM

I understand, on the same wavelength again

Jenna Logan
Date: 10/17/2021 4:38:00 AM

We were but I dismissed the judgement calls of that contest over several outstanding N/As that were overlooked and rewrote my Haiku. Two of them and made my bird an eagle. Yours deserved merit. Thanks, David.

Jan Allison

Date: 10/16/2021 5:20:00 PM

wonderful imagery, perhaps you could enter these in one of line's contests, hugs Jan xx

Jenna Logan
Date: 10/16/2021 5:24:00 PM

I removed the contest name as well as the sponsor. I’m sure we both know why. Yours was excellent and worthy of much better. I’m doing ok and will have more time on Monday. Hugs

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/16/2021 4:21:00 PM

Very nice description, Jenna. Also, I like how it starts with the syllable night and ends with the rhyme flight!! (it's fun to put rhyme into haiku!)

Jenna Logan
Date: 10/16/2021 5:25:00 PM

It is. Thanks.