Night - Intermingled

I feel unease, when trees creek so 
(The stillest slice of night cuts deep)
As wind chimes chatter to and fro 
From dusk till dawn my nerves do seize
(Alone with only mirrored thoughts)
When trees creek so, I feel unease 

Strange things I see, when darkness falls
(Reflecting all that softly weep)
Soft shadows dancing down the halls 
Translucent specters watching me
(The stillest slice of night cuts deep)
When darkness falls, strange things I see 

At night alone, my thoughts do stray
(Exposing fears that silence reaps)
Splintered memories, barbed and splayed 
So many voices – most my own
(A splintered plank, now blindly walked)
My thoughts do stray, at night alone 

The white coats come, when daylight breaks
(The stillest slice of night cuts deep)
The blue pill helps reduce the shakes
First eyes are checked, then straps undone
(Alone with only mirrored thoughts)
When daylight breaks, the white coats come

David Mohn
Poem 1 – Alone at Night - 28 Feb 2014 (Swap Quatrain)
Poem 2 – Gloamings’s Razor – 09 Aug 2014 (Triolet) 
Craig Cornish Intermingle Contest
Copyright © | Year Posted 2015

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April 18, 2015 at 6:42 PM
David, Congratulations on your fine win. LINDA
Roper Avatar
April 17, 2015 at 1:15 PM
Congratulations on your win a 7. Blessings dear friend Eve
Dietrich Avatar
April 16, 2015 at 10:35 PM
wow, Spectacular intermingling!!! Congrats to you.
Haight Avatar
April 16, 2015 at 5:28 PM
Such a wonderful mingling of poems, David, that flow together so well with thought and feelings. Congrats on your HM win. Sandra
Allison Avatar
April 16, 2015 at 4:50 PM
These meld together so beautifully David many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
Leiser Avatar
March 6, 2015 at 10:53 PM
I absolutely love this poem! So unique in its message and presentation. Should do well in the contest. A 7 from me! :)
Callus Avatar
February 28, 2015 at 8:05 AM
You have done a very good job here, David! No easy feat, for sure. The two intermingling forms fit comfortably together. gl in the contest. // paul
Meade Avatar
February 22, 2015 at 5:20 PM
The two poems flow nicely together and has a haunting theme that grabbed me! Outstanding 7
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