Never Trust the One You Lust

Another middle-schooler poem I made! ^.^
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Never trust the one you lust
For I have done so
I saw the figure in the rain
As dark as the crow
For death himself had stood there
With all his cunning glee,
But then I look inside the reflection 
Only seeing me!
I die a thousand times 
Yet the clock still chimes 
Am I ever to flee?
Heh—now I clearly see the end:
Sanities’ my only friend

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011



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Date: 6/20/2016 11:07:00 PM
A curious oldie, Laura ... quite gothic. It seems to paint a portrait of someone who lusts after death itself. You seem to have more of a lust for life, in my humble opinion. But it's powerful and stark writing nonetheless.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 6/23/2016 7:46:00 AM
This is one of those poems that sticks with me still today. I've memorized this one, not for any reason in particular, it just kinda randomly sticks. Heh. And yes, you are correct my friend. I wrote a lot of dark stuff in middle school for some reason. Don't recall why. <3 ~Laura
Date: 4/29/2012 3:26:00 AM
Very impressive!!! Love your work..INK-U-SCRIPT
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Date: 12/22/2011 9:45:00 PM
My Dear Laura, You absolutely Amaze me I look at Your Avatar picture, So Young,So Beautiful, and 100% POETESS YOUR words so Mature, YOUR Style so Elite I find YOUR POETRY So endearing and YOUR Comments so Heartfelt I would LOVE to talk with YOU on POETRY Chat after the Holidays I deeply Thank-YOU for YOUR Gracious Comments YOUR Heart is so Pure LOVE YOU ALWAYS and FOREVER YOUR Liege...Harry ( HG )
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Date: 11/1/2011 1:50:00 AM
I think you were lucky to have sanity with you. Great write, madame. And thank you for you kind comments too.
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Date: 8/3/2011 7:31:00 PM
wow. what more can i say?
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Date: 7/4/2011 1:19:00 PM
I really enjoyed this , so close to my own heart , very nice read :-)
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Date: 7/1/2011 5:39:00 PM
Another good one, I'd expect nothing less - Kyle
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