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Never Trust the One You Lust

Another middle-schooler poem I made! ^.^ ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Never trust the one you lust For I have done so I saw the figure in the rain As dark as the crow For death himself had stood there With all his cunning glee, But then I look inside the reflection Only seeing me! I die a thousand times Yet the clock still chimes Am I ever to flee? Heh—now I clearly see the end: Sanities’ my only friend

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Timothy Hicks

Date: 6/20/2016 11:07:00 PM

A curious oldie, Laura ... quite gothic. It seems to paint a portrait of someone who lusts after death itself. You seem to have more of a lust for life, in my humble opinion. But it's powerful and stark writing nonetheless.

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 6/23/2016 7:46:00 AM

This is one of those poems that sticks with me still today. I've memorized this one, not for any reason in particular, it just kinda randomly sticks. Heh. And yes, you are correct my friend. I wrote a lot of dark stuff in middle school for some reason. Don't recall why. <3 ~Laura

Pace Ink-U-Script

Date: 4/29/2012 3:26:00 AM

Very impressive!!! Love your work..INK-U-SCRIPT

Hgarvey Daniel Esquire

Date: 12/22/2011 9:45:00 PM

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