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Needle In the Hay

I thought you were my needle in the hay The soulmate I’d been searching for, for endless days The love of a lifetime, here on poetrysoup Right under my nose, and I never knew Till I found you one night, when I couldn’t sleep Your words like sweet bees, pollinating me We chatted and joked and had so much fun I realized at once that you were “the one” The one to complete me, the one I had sought Until I saw your new picture, and saw you were NOT The “Chris” that I thought - but a girl! A GIRL! A gir-l couldn’t complete my world! You weren’t a needle in the hay You were just you, with your gir-l face Your tiger picture, a fantasy mistake - A dead flower I shake out of my vase The dreams I held fast Red petals, now in the trash 3/12/12 Inspired by Chris Aechtner

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 4/25/2012 1:37:00 PM
This is impressively sad. I absolutely loved your version of Needle In the Hay. Wow. Always, Laura
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Date: 3/18/2012 1:36:00 PM
Enjoyed reading your work..Very creative for the contest..Winner for sure..Thanks for the honor of being in the winners' circle in your contest..There were so many great ones to complete the verse and so varied...Sara
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Date: 3/16/2012 9:02:00 AM
This is brilliant, Susan. love a interesting poem, and this is sure interesting. very well written and enjoyable. harry
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Date: 3/16/2012 7:46:00 AM
Beautiful and powerful (and funny too) - so this Chris is a heart-breaker huh? ; } In particular the last stanza really does it for me - so fantastic!
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Date: 3/15/2012 10:27:00 AM
I wish i can believe that Chris is a girl.. lovely poem and funny too :)haha-Charma
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Date: 3/14/2012 1:33:00 AM
To be unlucky in love, such a sad story. Live and learn...LOL this is hilarious. Thanks, I needed to laugh tonight. I hope you win with this entry. Blessings, Rhonda
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Date: 3/14/2012 12:07:00 AM
hahahaha, here you go continuing the MYTH of CHRIS. And getting Daver to go along with you. this is really cute and fun, Susan. I hope Chris won't get too big a head. hahaha. What an interesting poem. I just hope everyone realizes it's pure fiction. It is, isn't it?? hahahaha. Luv ya, Andrea
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Date: 3/13/2012 5:05:00 PM
Susan...very nice job!! I like the way you bring us in and stir our emotions along with the subjects...classic "gir-l"....good luck in the contest...huggsss~Deb~
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Date: 3/13/2012 2:19:00 PM
I also thought Chris was a man and was surprised to find otherwise, but I like her mucho and she writes good stuff. Thanks, by the way, for reading my stuff. Luck in the contest. daver
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