Near Body Experience

It was about twelve noon when they asked me to count backwards

Only the potion they used on me just seemed to push me onwards

I got down eighty seven when I heard these voices

"No one has ever gotten this far", "We better give him more C's

I opened my eyes to see seven faces peering down!

I lost consciousness at eighty six, then went void of all sound

I seemed to flip over as I floated up into the ceiling

But not before I saw a candy bar on top that railing

The scene changed to a dark gray, I was really floating

There was an entrance to a castle was before me, looming

I was heading for it when I saw their blurry faces

They were on both sides, moving in their spaces

I tried to make them out, but I went into the tunnel

It was so warm and safe, only for a very short while

A tiny pin of light was just ahead, I regained my sight

I recalled entering the light was sure death. Was I right?

It grew evermore brilliant, I couldn't close my eyes

I heard a voice say " I want to live" for three times

It was a miracle in disguise, as I felt this pull ease up

There was something there, and it wasn't any ghost! Shut up!

I started to float back out of the tunnel, in somewhat relief

Could see the beings at the tunnels entrance, as I retreat?

I was a stones throw away from them when I was jolted to life

I woke in a hospital bed, looking at a doctor dressed all in white

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012



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Date: 8/8/2013 6:43:00 AM
I would like to read this in depth without rhyme just as you recall everything. One thing for certain if you don't write everything down it will be erased from memory,.
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Date: 7/27/2013 6:50:00 PM
wow, I missed this one from before. It's true?? Wish I would have something like that happen to me!!(but only if I can ever afford health insurance for the surgery. haha)
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Date: 5/1/2012 8:42:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in Catie's "Obe's" contest Mitch. Love, Carol
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Date: 4/29/2012 5:03:00 AM
Hi congrats on your win, sorry this is a cut and paste congrats, I am on my hols with limited connectHi ionXX
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Date: 4/26/2012 10:52:00 PM
Mitch, hello.... can i help you remove that jacket..lol... this one is very entertaining ...love it...always...pd
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Date: 4/26/2012 9:51:00 AM
Well written!! I was held captive! descriptive and well told story my friend!!..:JP]
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