Brooke S. Poet Narrative

My Vacation

as i went to hawii i saw beaches 
        good thing they are not covered in leaches

          i thought i was tough
         those waves are rough


              as i went boating 
          i saw two fish floating

                        are they dead 
                          i had said

                                               i went back to shore
                                             but i didnt know what more

        
                                                                    as it became dawn 
                                                                          i finally yawned

                                                                                                    oh what a day
                                                                                                       i would say!

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Carol Sunshine Brown May 3, 2011 at 4:12 AM A warm welcome to PoetrySoup I offer to you Brooke. I wish for you the best in your writing endeavors whatever they may be. May you find inspiration by reading some of the poetry written here by other poets. Read and comment on their's and they will return in kind. May the sun shine on you that you might find great joy in your life. Love and blessing always, Carol

Nebeolisa Okwudili May 2, 2011 at 6:27 PM Good poem with nice rimes, Brooke.