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My January Fix Brought February's Kick

8x8x8x8 Poetry Contest Charles Messina So here we are in the new year Throw confetti wishes and cheer January opened its doors nicely Merry old me entered modestly Shook the monkey off my back Took his banana in place of a snack How losing a few pounds inspires Now I can climb the tree of desires

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Connie Pachecho

Date: 3/26/2025 3:02:00 AM

So here we are in the New Year~~ Throw confetti wishes and cheer~~ January arrived nicely~~ Merry old me crossed modestly~~ Shook the big monkey off my back~~ Took his banana for a snack~~ How losing a few pounds inspires~~ Now I can climb trees of desires~~

Connie Pachecho
Date: 3/26/2025 3:09:00 AM

Connie, with all these edits that you have now made your title can be changed to-My January Kick Brought March's Fix

Connie Pachecho
Date: 3/26/2025 3:03:00 AM

Connie, how hard was that?

Connie Pachecho

Date: 3/26/2025 2:48:00 AM

Connie, why don't you read the rules you silly goose. The rhymes at the start and at the end of the sentences are correct. The story line has a good flow. But you didn't read the contest details of having 8 syllables per line and your counts are way off (which is an easy fix). Man. You'll never be a swan. Read carefully next time.

Connie Pachecho
Date: 3/26/2025 2:48:00 AM

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